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Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
Me, crashed but not crushed!
You turned out to be a fraud
A mere cocoon
Energy and scent
Physical but elusive
Your wild animality
Faltering beauty
But only at the surface
Your weakness my strength
You turned out to be a fraud
A mere cocoon
Energy and scent
Physical but elusive
Your wild animality
Faltering beauty
But only at the surface
Your weakness my strength
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Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
10th May 2014 5:49pm
whatever your disappointments, there's
still that animal power lurking beneath
the surface...
still that animal power lurking beneath
the surface...
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re: Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
11th May 2014 4:08pm
Well, not for me anymore ... That's the sad thing, exactly, Jag. Always happy to see that you feel me! xx
Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
10th May 2014 6:40pm
Love all three, but
the middle one, particularly,
it leaps off the page
which is perhaps because
it describes everything I'm
not!! ..:)
the middle one, particularly,
it leaps off the page
which is perhaps because
it describes everything I'm
not!! ..:)
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re: Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
11th May 2014 4:11pm
:-). You're so sweet, Paul! Thank you!
Everything you're not ...! Just dig for the animal inside you! Surely you'll find at least a bit of a lion deep down ... Nobody would be able to write so stunning poems without a lion's heart.
Everything you're not ...! Just dig for the animal inside you! Surely you'll find at least a bit of a lion deep down ... Nobody would be able to write so stunning poems without a lion's heart.
Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
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10th May 2014 8:53pm
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Dear Gabriel! Love your comment! No, I won't want to change anyone, beware. I'm about to say good-bye to someone who does me no good anymore. The change would be my task.
Hm ... I chose the love category since it was .. at least good love-making :-).
Hm ... I chose the love category since it was .. at least good love-making :-).
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11th May 2014 9:00pm
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Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
10th May 2014 9:31pm
re: Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
11th May 2014 4:19pm
I can be serious and deep ... yes.
But my mood will change and then I'll possibly write something completely different stuff :-). We'll see ...
But my mood will change and then I'll possibly write something completely different stuff :-). We'll see ...
Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
10th May 2014 11:31pm
re: Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
11th May 2014 4:22pm
:-). Encouraging imagery you offer, John! Thanks for pointing to the option to fly again soon! I'll brush off my wings and take to the skies, promise!
Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
11th May 2014 7:51pm
"Energy and scent " "Faltering beauty " what a way with words deep and true <3
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re: Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
11th May 2014 8:53pm
Dear sharneindium, what flattering words you have for this poem. I'd like to thank you so much and feel humbled <3!
Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
11th May 2014 11:08pm
re: Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
12th May 2014 8:35am
I will, Hash, I'm about to rise from the "ashes" :-). Good to have your support! Thank you so much!
Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
12th May 2014 3:51am
Bravo!
" Me crashed, but not crushed"- love it!
For me, I'm glad to see it sooner rather than later.
" Me crashed, but not crushed"- love it!
For me, I'm glad to see it sooner rather than later.
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re: Re: Cocoon - Trilogy of Senryu
12th May 2014 8:33am
Same with me, Lena!It's always good to know where one stands. Love your comments, thank you so much!