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Ashes !!!
Our beautiful story of love was spread
You were my mentor, my bestest of friend
Senses of you controlled my mind
I was a worshiper lost in divine.
The fault was love, intensity and pace
You were crazy and I was insane
Pointed fingers we ignored it all
Had utmost faith for love wont fall.
For you were Muslim and I was Hindu
whole community was against, except a few
The result of love was well known in advance
When tried eloping, were shot in a glance.
Were we supposed to be burnt and dead ?
Was our story a normal trend ?
Why these people pay no heed ?
Why were we left only to bleed ?
Now, the ashes of you and me
lie on the floor carefree
people look and walk away
Is this the love we are taught today ?
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Re: Ashes !!!
9th May 2014 4:57pm
That's heart-wrenching, Brinda. I don't think that God meant to part manhood by races but meant to unite our wonderful diversity. Humans make the rules and humans act against each other in the name of God. It's a deep poem I very much like.
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10th May 2014 5:42am
Thanks a lot !! Still in many parts of world people are forced to love in their races !
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10th May 2014 6:25am
This was deeply moving, Brinda! Penned well too!
Religion, spirituality, sexual orientation, race/ethnicity, language, etc......
Ohhh the colors of the rainbow for division. Xo
Religion, spirituality, sexual orientation, race/ethnicity, language, etc......
Ohhh the colors of the rainbow for division. Xo
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10th May 2014 8:05am
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10th May 2014 7:34am
Dope poem Brinda,I can say you went deep,but at the end one had to make his/her own decision not just being forced to love.
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10th May 2014 8:06am
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11th May 2014 8:07am
Well penned Brins but then again you never do this half-heartedly. The intensity of this poem, the power is admirable, hats-off Brins. Kudos!
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13th May 2014 7:01am
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Anonymous
12th May 2014 5:26am
Wow! What a traumatic write. Really felt the burn they my soul reading this. Powerful and impactful write. :)
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13th May 2014 7:03am
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16th May 2014 10:28am
WOW!!!Brinda....Your thoughts...is the truth from which the general people are blind...
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16th May 2014 10:29am
WOW!!!Brinda....Your thoughts...is the truth from which the general people are blind...
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22nd May 2014 5:17pm
You have visited a theme which has been way to prevalent in human experience---dividing people based on differences while ignoring the common connections. You give this a dose of authenticity that makes the read even more rewarding to the eyes.
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27th May 2014 6:17pm
Yes Sir! Prevailing in many parts of the world! Thanks for your valuable comment and sharing your views :)
Re: Ashes !!!
10th Jun 2014 8:55pm
Wow! This poetry at it's finest. Only by personal experiences can beauty evolve. Oh yeah, sorry for your lost. Maybe poetry will give you some kind of solace.
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Anonymous
16th Jun 2014 10:42pm
I truly feel the emotion of this poem, because I have been through this same situation of loving a man who, because of religion and differences, I could not be with, because his family would look down upon it. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem!
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17th Jun 2014 9:25am
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18th Jun 2014 5:07am
This touched me. Its so heartbreaking but beautiful. Beautifully written as well. The emotions are strong in this poem
Were we supposed to be burnt and dead?
Was our story a normal trend?
Why theae people pay no heed?
Why were we left only to bleed?
This part got to me.
I pray all is well and keep that pretty chin up! You're a beautiful poet! It truely shows what goes on in the world. I pray things change
Lyndsay
Were we supposed to be burnt and dead?
Was our story a normal trend?
Why theae people pay no heed?
Why were we left only to bleed?
This part got to me.
I pray all is well and keep that pretty chin up! You're a beautiful poet! It truely shows what goes on in the world. I pray things change
Lyndsay
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18th Jun 2014 11:24am