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‘Smile Henry’
So I stole a title
And misquoted it
To boot
From the great man himself
Google if you wish
You fucking pedants
I couldn’t give
A clichéd flying toss
Mistrusting
And Cut
Duly discarded
And pasted
Come on you wankers
Shoot me
Carrot breath – Idiot!
Yes, that would be me
You lucky bastards
Getting time with her
You lucky lucky bastards
Carrot breath – Idiot!
Go on
Give them something
To help drain their ink
A half expected comma
They won’t be happy
Then just save it
And misquoted it
To boot
From the great man himself
Google if you wish
You fucking pedants
I couldn’t give
A clichéd flying toss
Mistrusting
And Cut
Duly discarded
And pasted
Come on you wankers
Shoot me
Carrot breath – Idiot!
Yes, that would be me
You lucky bastards
Getting time with her
You lucky lucky bastards
Carrot breath – Idiot!
Go on
Give them something
To help drain their ink
A half expected comma
They won’t be happy
Then just save it
Published 9th May 2014
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9th May 2014 11:55pm
this is an intriguing piece, the repetitions are uncanny and jarring, nicely done with the exclamation mark, the dash, the subject as well of carrot breath, which reflects the writing style of this said Smile Henry from what I have read so far. I liked the wit in "A half expected comma" - tickled me. i can't stop re-reading it.
25th Jun 2014 4:56pm
Thx for the detailed feedback CB & glad it tickled such a fine writer. Rgds, S
