Taste part one

I'm having writers block this I will fix it needs work any suggestions I'll love to hear them

actually Gg, this is one of your best erotic poems to me hands down.  This sounds more like you come across to others most of the time imho.  It has a different flow and I like the way your rhymes here hover around the "a's".  That's actually kind of different.

You doing the taking of the pleasure up to the last line  and then giving.  I like that.  This is good.

MMM

Ty your opinion means a lot to me.. I'm glad you like it.. I just think it needs work but I'll leave it alone and work on part two ;)

I agree... Especially the lingering.

This poem has wonderful mental images in it.  You have done a good piece of writing!  I like it.  

You have one typo you might want to fix..
"on your tongue your savoring every taste"
I think you meant "you're savoring every taste." If I am wrong or missing something, sorry.

I really enjoyed this poem.

ty and yes i fixed it ty

Isnt it disturbing that 300 people or perhaps more read this and only 3 or so left comments?
'Feeling your erection on my thighs'? Haha, I mean this is a masterpiece and even tho I'm a guy, I can picture it in my 'girl-mind's' eye!!!
Underground mistress needs to do something about the 'leaving a comment' thing..... what exactly, I still can not point tho!!
Goodwork lady, haha, yeah I know  you are a woman now.

It Is disturbing but that's the way of the world sex sells.. Kinda pathetic but it's true.. Ty I'm glad you enjoyed it slim
I'm dying to read your work I think u will be more of an urban writer I like that seeing that I lived in the ghetto 75% of my life.. I can relate to that style of writing more so than the gothic or extremely intelligant poems the ones where your like huh what lol.. And I'm sure your girls minds eye is freaky she is probably not ready to explore that side yet give it time age gives us women a freaky nature.. I'm not that old I'm 32 that's the new 20's you know lol

Haha, you looking forward to reading my poem? Ah, I fear you might have to wait for eternity then, haha, cause am always on this 'writers block' thing, I once wrote a poem about writers block!!! Yeah, thats some 'crazy' dude in here but I think theres a far more 'crazy' dude in your writings than me, haha, that fits, right? I got a girls mind eye, you got a 'crazy' dude, how cute?
I'm new here so I probably might get this wrong, but I think your writings beam with expeirence than most here, its like your words walk right up to the reader and say 'theres alot like me in there'.... and tho I notice we have very different culture and all, I still can relate to whatever you are sayin, and oh dont talk about my style yet cuz its full of s**t, like they say- 'you write poems wearing daipers' lol.

Lmfao yes I have a crazy dude in almost every poem.. That's to funny I wrote a poem about writes block myself it sucked because I had writers block lol.. You have to have something in your head.. Pull something out lol your my personal favorite without a poem how sweet.. Ty so much for your comment on my poems that was very sweet and touching.. Xoxox

i agree with MrM - nothing to be added / altered here... the flow of the poem reflects the flow of the orgasm & whilst the imagery is strong, there's just enough left over for the imagination to go to work... perfect

Thankyou I will leave it as is

ok thank you

I am not lol I don't know u to be angry with u

Ty I think

Haha, Gg, Random Poem gave me this. Wow, long time gone huh? I remember the writer's block you had back then. Glad you're still putting down your thoughts.

Awe vision it's gone again lol. Back on writers block lol Ty xoxo

Looking forward to part two... Unless it already exists and just haven't seen it ;)

It may but I think I named it something else Ty xoxo

Love to feel you satisfied- fav line!!
Great pt. one Gg!!
I enjoy your pen work a great deal!!
Lovely read!!(change nothing)!!

Sir Lancelott