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Give and Take
She gave more than she had
and I took it.
Knowing she had nothing to give
knowing she needed more
than I wanted.
But I took it all and she kept giving
where she got I don't know
didn't care.
Stripping her soul till it was naked
nothing left.
No need for her anymore.
Left her for dead.
Oh was I wrong,
she's still giving
and I still need.
and I took it.
Knowing she had nothing to give
knowing she needed more
than I wanted.
But I took it all and she kept giving
where she got I don't know
didn't care.
Stripping her soul till it was naked
nothing left.
No need for her anymore.
Left her for dead.
Oh was I wrong,
she's still giving
and I still need.
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Re: Give and Take
1st Apr 2014 1:11am
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1st Apr 2014 1:33am
Re: Give and Take
1st Apr 2014 1:16am
we've all used people,
and we've all be used...
just sometimes we get it right...
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Re: Give and Take
1st Apr 2014 1:29am
A very honest write Hash though I'm sure you do your share of giving in different ways :) with love Crim
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1st Apr 2014 1:38am
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1st Apr 2014 12:24pm
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1st Apr 2014 11:51pm
Re: Give and Take
1st Apr 2014 1:44pm
Good title, a necessary ingredient to any relationship.
Who ever said love was 50/50 was wrong, it changes daily. Sometimes it's 60/40, 70/30,110/-10 what one needs and the other has to spare. when it's true love the pendulum should should give or take as needed.
Who ever said love was 50/50 was wrong, it changes daily. Sometimes it's 60/40, 70/30,110/-10 what one needs and the other has to spare. when it's true love the pendulum should should give or take as needed.
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1st Apr 2014 11:56pm
Re: Give and Take
1st Apr 2014 5:10pm
Very good write. This might be a little petty but you should takes comma from L4. It really bothers me and I don't know why.
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1st Apr 2014 11:58pm
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1st Apr 2014 9:58pm
Re: Give and Take
1st Apr 2014 11:33pm
To have such a selfless giver is a blessing
Sure you give her what she needs as well though
Deeply felt, real, raw... Expressive :)
Sure you give her what she needs as well though
Deeply felt, real, raw... Expressive :)
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4th Apr 2014 10:40pm
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