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Please leave.
the ol' man won't leave
his breath assaults my nostrils
and ears
he devours everything
now he's about to take another dump
his breath assaults my nostrils
and ears
he devours everything
now he's about to take another dump
Published 23rd Mar 2014
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23rd Mar 2014 4:03pm
Ouch, caught between needs of another and personal space...
Concisely captured, those haikus are paying off in the brevity arena.
Concisely captured, those haikus are paying off in the brevity arena.
23rd Mar 2014 9:05pm
23rd Mar 2014 6:50pm
23rd Mar 2014 9:06pm
23rd Mar 2014 8:25pm
We can certainly 'scents' the moment of discomfort!
(Pass the "Febreeze"....p l e a s e!):0
I must say,the style of this senryu has a definite way of reaching your readers...on such a personal level! :)
Enjoyed, my friend!
(Pass the "Febreeze"....p l e a s e!):0
I must say,the style of this senryu has a definite way of reaching your readers...on such a personal level! :)
Enjoyed, my friend!
23rd Mar 2014 9:08pm
23rd Mar 2014 10:25pm
24th Mar 2014 00:36am
Mother always gets in the way ... In fact she instigates
Thanks for the read and advice
Thanks for the read and advice
24th Mar 2014 4:38pm
Shit fire! What a stinky poem <--literally! lol..
Enjoyed this Pedro! Love your humor....Xo
Enjoyed this Pedro! Love your humor....Xo
24th Mar 2014 7:05pm
28th May 2014 2:41am
28th May 2014 6:36am
Glad it made you laugh! While it recalls an uncle of mine - the idea was sparked by a late winter storm that was looming at the time.
