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Lolita
Disenchanted
a lonely Lolita
mascara smeared eyes
playing hopscotch
with the big boys
getting burned
my innocence
stolen away
at a tender young age
frolicking in the sun no more
my skies turned black
with self hate
I used to chase the stars
hoping to catch one by it's tail
through all of this wonderment remained
a little Lolita
with pig tails in my hair
played with the big boys
and fell into the deep end
where I couldn't swim
a lonely Lolita
mascara smeared eyes
playing hopscotch
with the big boys
getting burned
my innocence
stolen away
at a tender young age
frolicking in the sun no more
my skies turned black
with self hate
I used to chase the stars
hoping to catch one by it's tail
through all of this wonderment remained
a little Lolita
with pig tails in my hair
played with the big boys
and fell into the deep end
where I couldn't swim
Published 22nd Mar 2014
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22nd Mar 2014 5:53pm
22nd Mar 2014 5:57pm
22nd Mar 2014 5:58pm
Lovely Crim, I feel this straight forward, powerful piece.
You couldn't swim, for a season. You now are churning the emotional waters. And, I like it. :)
You couldn't swim, for a season. You now are churning the emotional waters. And, I like it. :)
22nd Mar 2014 6:03pm
22nd Mar 2014 6:20pm
If I ever find out that your wear lots of beige, drive a mini van and work at a big box store in customer service I'm gonna be mighty pissed off.
Great writing Vamp Brenda
Great writing Vamp Brenda
22nd Mar 2014 6:22pm
I'm no soccer mom and I don't own beige :) thank you for making me smile Poet with love Brenda
22nd Mar 2014 6:25pm
Anonymous
22nd Mar 2014 6:50pm
I used to chase the stars
hoping to catch one by it's tail
through all of this wonderment remains
Favorite lines. I think this describes most children. Great poem :)
hoping to catch one by it's tail
through all of this wonderment remains
Favorite lines. I think this describes most children. Great poem :)
22nd Mar 2014 7:23pm
Anonymous
22nd Mar 2014 7:26pm
Another poignant write Brenda, capturing loss of innocence in this beautiful piece.
I love the stanza on chasing stars, that is one magnificent point in the poem.
I love the stanza on chasing stars, that is one magnificent point in the poem.
22nd Mar 2014 7:34pm
22nd Mar 2014 8:11pm
capturing the moment before blame and shame, when all was still starlight and questions - cool/true write Crim
particularly the pivotal:
"mascara smeared
under my eyes"
particularly the pivotal:
"mascara smeared
under my eyes"
22nd Mar 2014 8:26pm
22nd Mar 2014 9:11pm
I love the way you capture sadness. You do it with such soft finesse! Stunning imagery, Crim.Xo
22nd Mar 2014 9:19pm
22nd Mar 2014 9:40pm
Brenda....
as I have said many times PLEASE write a Poetry Book and I wwwwwill be one of the first to buy it...
You have a relationship with words that most people could only dream about!
XOXO
Fire
as I have said many times PLEASE write a Poetry Book and I wwwwwill be one of the first to buy it...
You have a relationship with words that most people could only dream about!
XOXO
Fire
22nd Mar 2014 9:47pm
22nd Mar 2014 10:10pm
Playing with the big boys, enticed the sweetest of them all. I love this write. Great writing*
22nd Mar 2014 11:54pm
23rd Mar 2014 2:11am
You've not only learned how to swim.....but you walk on water now. Great write. :)
23rd Mar 2014 2:23am
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23rd Mar 2014 2:53pm
23rd Mar 2014 5:46am
Brenda, i read this last night and was too tongue tied to comment, i still feel that way. you write pain with such poise.
23rd Mar 2014 2:54pm
beautiful Mia thank you for your kind words and for understanding this write.. with love Brenda :)
23rd Mar 2014 7:17am
a lot of tragedy in this, Crim. you attack poetry from many directions. that takes talent & experience...
23rd Mar 2014 2:56pm
thank you John I've got plenty of experiences to draw from.. I always enjoy your visits :) with love Crim
Omg thank you for killing me with this
my heart aches from this soul weeps spirit cries to the beauty of this magnificent write but u can still catch stars by their tails and ascend them back from where they came from.
my heart aches from this soul weeps spirit cries to the beauty of this magnificent write but u can still catch stars by their tails and ascend them back from where they came from.
23rd Mar 2014 2:57pm
thank you AD for reminding me I can still catch the stars and for your kind comment :) with love Crim
23rd Mar 2014 5:24pm
This makes me want to weep for the young girl you once were, the young girl perhaps still trapped by a tragic past...but then also cry in joy for the strong resilient honest woman that has evolved from those same tragedies.. sending hugs..with love and respect.. xoxo domore
23rd Mar 2014 7:16pm
thank you lovely one for such a compassionate and tender comment hugs back Crim
Anonymous
23rd Mar 2014 7:43pm
Wow, this one causes a lot of heartache for the girl. Very wonderful piece!
23rd Mar 2014 8:14pm
24th Mar 2014 3:11pm
My goodness do I know about chasing those damned stars!
Poignant n expressed well!
Poignant n expressed well!
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