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It comes to this
When you see people with the heart,
always the heart,
you ache from the pain they have to endure
but wish them well, even as they lash out.
Sometimes they lash right at you,
and you haven't grown the thick skin for it
because you think the thicker skin will stop you from loving.
So you hurt and feel foolish,
while it runs right to your center.
Worst, still,
you lash out at anyone who is near, reaching out to you.
And so it ripples out,
the drop of pain that started in a pond,
now an ocean.
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Re: It comes to this
19th Mar 2014 2:31pm
Atakti I love the truth of this poem and the closing is brilliant!!! with love and respect Crim
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re: Re: It comes to this
20th Mar 2014 6:06am
Thank you for the love, Crim. I am taking a leaf out of your book and writing more openly.
Re: It comes to this
19th Mar 2014 3:08pm
....damn i'll be nicer next time-I didn't mean to offend ;)
Always excellence Atakti!!!
Always excellence Atakti!!!
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20th Mar 2014 6:08am
Re: It comes to this
19th Mar 2014 8:40pm
This is poignant Atakti and today, reaches me on that level.
Much depth and wonderfully written.
Much depth and wonderfully written.
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re: Re: It comes to this
20th Mar 2014 6:09am
Ah, thanks, M. I wrote it intentionally in the second person, to remind myself that others feel the same at times.
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Re: It comes to this
20th Mar 2014 9:53am
there's a lot to be said for thick skin, it's necessary armor. you learn that in time...
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20th Mar 2014 11:25am
Oh, I'm sure it's good armor.
What I'll learn is another matter...
Thanks, Feddeler!
What I'll learn is another matter...
Thanks, Feddeler!
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Re: It comes to this
1st Apr 2014 10:08pm
Christ woman! that second stanza is about as poignant as it gets. rather chuffed I randomly popped in. beautiful write.
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4th Apr 2014 7:54am
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re: Re: It comes to this
1st May 2014 7:24am
I truly appreciate your thoughts on this, Jack, thank you.
There are some hard lessons, even in empathy, I agree. Your two steps sound so calm... the unruly emotions will wreak havoc though. Another lesson, yes. As for self-pity, that trap is a tricky one.
Thanks again!
There are some hard lessons, even in empathy, I agree. Your two steps sound so calm... the unruly emotions will wreak havoc though. Another lesson, yes. As for self-pity, that trap is a tricky one.
Thanks again!