I Have To Say

amazing, love the way the flow is seamless. Bravo

Thank You very much Hades!

It means a lot. I find myself very busy nowadays, so I'm glad that I can still produce pieces such as this.

The thing is
    you're scared
           I'm scared,
Would you like me
    to write it in blood?
           Huh, 'stud'?


Awesome line.  It's a good poem, relatable and direct. I enjoy the dripping sarcasm throughout.
I'm shit with constructive critique, but there is way too many comas. I struggle with that to.

Hello kourtnissixxx; believe that the use of those comas are called in writing Caesura, a strategic or timely pause, of something is intended specifically for a certain sound, or way intended way of talking, its all in the way that you use it, say it, an think it, if it was an essay according to Apa standard style formatting then yes, but with poetry an writin, it is different...

Thank You soo much!!

And Wolf is right.
I hate having to place commas and such in a poem, but I still do it because it makes reader interpret the poem the way it sounds in my head.

I'm not trying to bomb on you as a writer...
I actually quite enjoy youre poems. The commas wheree just distracting to mer

No No... I didn't take it that way... ^_^
thank You though.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Oh Man, Love this, could hear Axle Rose singin this... Course, been in a heartache drinkin binge for days now, with guns an system as my go to guys Hahaha, but as always my friend, Dig your writing, great one here... Could hear something where you write about the "I", where you were
before,
"Some where,
     in this... tragedy,
is the me,
     I was suppose to be.
but how can I,
be the 'I'
    I was?
The 'I',
before there was an..
         us.

I'm furious!! "
Straight forward an deep my friend, have personal issues with the "I" myself,
The ending is strong,
"for knowing that
you love me more than


          I love you "
Much of me Writin is off of that also, you pulled me in, which great writers do: Eddie

Only a great writer can recognize other great writers. I am jus one of the few good writers in this whole pot of  legendary poetries.

But Thank You solo much.
Ur comment just warms my heart.

:-D

I agree with kourtnissixxx. Those lines were most profound to me throughout this whole poem. Not getting me wrong, the whole thing was 'da bomb', but those just grasped me through the screen. I definitely can relate to almost every word.. And ''I find myself very busy nowadays, so I'm glad that I can still produce pieces such as this.'' .. Man I thought I was the only one. But you've definitely succeeded in producing a masterpiece. Great job.

Time isn't a luxury when you really start getting the hang on Adult life.
Especially in my country.

The words for a piece is right there dormant, just waiting for inspiration to hit u in the face. Lol.

Thank You for kind words Hipster

Wow... You've commented on my poems and liked them and everything and I wish that I could write something as good as this. Amazing write. I love it.

You are an amazing writer urself Panda... so I feel humbled to know my write has reach high regards in ur book.

Heh. Thank you. ^ -^ You're an amazing writer as well. Keep up the awesome work. <3

WOW Ms. Mahorela that was a very creative piece!!
Great write!!
Love the read!! Awesome flow of ink!!!


Sir Lancelott



visit sometime

Thank You very much Lance.
means a lot.

And I definitely will.

This is Beautiful…great flow, I enjoyed this very much. Need to read you more! :)

wow. Thank you very much Jemac.

This piece is actually one of my fav pieces. I poured out my soul into it.

You know how it is when you're in the zone of a good write. :-D