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Feel the drive...
4 guns and one goes off
Through the forehead of my daughters mom
The 2nd into the heart of her lover
Thrice into my insignificant other
Quadinary through my temple right
My everyday pain falls to infinate night
Toe to toe...head to head with my demise
Death is the hand that places life in your eyes
We're blind...dare you tell me not...
To feel the drive?...
-Liquid Mind
Through the forehead of my daughters mom
The 2nd into the heart of her lover
Thrice into my insignificant other
Quadinary through my temple right
My everyday pain falls to infinate night
Toe to toe...head to head with my demise
Death is the hand that places life in your eyes
We're blind...dare you tell me not...
To feel the drive?...
-Liquid Mind
Published 2nd Mar 2014
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2nd Mar 2014 10:27am
I loved this. It has a fluidity to it that perfectly illustrated what you're saying. I found it both crazed and calculated at the same time. Maybe check for typos next time?
2nd Mar 2014 3:14pm
I recoiled as the bullet brushed a darkness against Your daughter.. it gave me chills to feel Death edging that close to her, all others looked Death in the eyes and tasted his wrath. Powerful write...Zacc*
2nd Mar 2014 5:03pm
Thanks so much HarleyQuinn..Im glad you read...I acyually read over this twice...guess I missed one lol! I'll fix now...thankyou...
2nd Mar 2014 5:07pm
Thankyou so much blueangel :-) everyone emerges unscathed but her...only for her to be driven as crazy as me after...
3rd Mar 2014 9:40pm
Hi I'm a wanna be singer and um this is gonna sound weird but this sounds really good when I put it to music so would you be okay if I made a cover of it (giving u credit) and posting it on vine?
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