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Thinking of Trains and Gravity (or) Time and Space
This parallel hell, I do detest
Will our trains never meet?
Reaching, reaching
never close enough to touch
Yet these wheels of determination
Have already been set in motion
What is it within me
That must always insist on proceeding through
on the least likely of paths?
Like the defiant child
who first learns of gravity
Never to fly (Oh really?)
jumping from the tallest tree
soaring to the ground
Pain
Yet....
We are ingenious creatures, no?
And flight isn't just for the birds
So if we can not reach
Then let us soar
Through time and space
to re-arrange the pieces of me and you
and fit
Not into a singularity
Never that
I wouldn't want that, and neither would you
Only to connect
So I could experience and witness
the journey that is you
And for you to witness my journey too
And the touching of skin
The touching of our temporary skin
To sweeten this journeys ride
To carry us through to the final destination
Will our trains never meet?
Reaching, reaching
never close enough to touch
Yet these wheels of determination
Have already been set in motion
What is it within me
That must always insist on proceeding through
on the least likely of paths?
Like the defiant child
who first learns of gravity
Never to fly (Oh really?)
jumping from the tallest tree
soaring to the ground
Pain
Yet....
We are ingenious creatures, no?
And flight isn't just for the birds
So if we can not reach
Then let us soar
Through time and space
to re-arrange the pieces of me and you
and fit
Not into a singularity
Never that
I wouldn't want that, and neither would you
Only to connect
So I could experience and witness
the journey that is you
And for you to witness my journey too
And the touching of skin
The touching of our temporary skin
To sweeten this journeys ride
To carry us through to the final destination
Published 26th Feb 2011
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26th Feb 2011 8:08pm
This is a beautiful poem..I love these lines..
Only to connect
So I could experience and witness
the journey that is you
And for you to witness my journey too
And the touching of skin
The touching of our temporary skin
To sweeten this journeys ride
To carry us through to the final destination
Wonderful peace Crimsin
Only to connect
So I could experience and witness
the journey that is you
And for you to witness my journey too
And the touching of skin
The touching of our temporary skin
To sweeten this journeys ride
To carry us through to the final destination
Wonderful peace Crimsin
Anonymous
26th Feb 2011 9:25pm
about half way through this poem and was wondering if I actually liked it or not...
Then -
the last stanza just hijacked my interest. I read it again (that stanza) and just have to say it's brilliant. It has become customary for us commentators to copy and paste a favourite line here, but I can't do that - the whole last stanza is just perfect.
I wish I had wrote that bit!
S
Then -
the last stanza just hijacked my interest. I read it again (that stanza) and just have to say it's brilliant. It has become customary for us commentators to copy and paste a favourite line here, but I can't do that - the whole last stanza is just perfect.
I wish I had wrote that bit!
S
27th Feb 2011 9:10am
such an accurate way to describe that feeling, always just missing. great stuff! and i agree with S, that last stanza rocks the rest for another read. fantastic. splendid even! [:
This spill has a serene spiritual feel of zen connectedness
and throughout
a peaceful feel of journeying with another soul
Interesting title -- would love to know more on how You came about to it
and throughout
a peaceful feel of journeying with another soul
Interesting title -- would love to know more on how You came about to it
