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I'm Out
Sure, lay it on the line,
tell me every last rule.
I need to know exactly
what I'm breaking.
Watch me shred the tome
that propped the door open,
the one that allowed every
other fucker's demon in.
My new look is "vicious bitch"
— step back for full effect.
Oh, sorry to miss your call,
leave a message at the click.
Don't bother thumping the wall
or leaning on the bell. I'm out,
pedal down, windows open,
eyes locked on the horizon.
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Re: I'm Out
12th Feb 2014 8:44pm
the oracle dips the bone pen in blood and lets out a lean and hungry future, when you pass the edge keep going, no over the rainbow will do, beyond the perimeter coming back isn't even a dream
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re: Re: I'm Out
13th Feb 2014 11:10am
I'm not afraid of the flip side of the dark rainbow. Fashion trends are way cooler, for a start...
Thanks, Sem!
Thanks, Sem!
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You're getting prolific, armed with a pair of iron quills moulded into knuckledusters, beating the fuck out of those damned motherfuckers, smearing red ink down halls of the words you kill. Spare nothing and no one, write on!!!
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re: Re: I'm Out
13th Feb 2014 11:12am
Oh, I intend to take no prisoners, be sure of that...
Awesome comment Case, I thank you for the nod towards my red ink smears!
Awesome comment Case, I thank you for the nod towards my red ink smears!
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Anonymous
13th Feb 2014 2:19am
Ripping into the future! Shine on....
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13th Feb 2014 11:14am
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13th Feb 2014 3:41am
Holy shit, as one might say "the bitch is back"
refreshing isn't? the final fuck off feels the best :)
digging the rawness :)
refreshing isn't? the final fuck off feels the best :)
digging the rawness :)
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re: Re: I'm Out
13th Feb 2014 11:15am
Raw steak is served, dig in.
Thank you, nikki. Your approval on this mean a lot, cuz your "fuck off" poetry rocks.
Thank you, nikki. Your approval on this mean a lot, cuz your "fuck off" poetry rocks.
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Anonymous
13th Feb 2014 4:17am
I love the sarcastic tone of this piece, both angry and yet detached. Very relateable.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
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re: Re: I'm Out
13th Feb 2014 11:16am
Oh, I've let the sarcastic off the leash and it feels good!
Thank you Indie, so glad you like it.
Thank you Indie, so glad you like it.
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Anonymous
13th Feb 2014 5:00am
oh wow Atakti, you aint mincin nothin here. I love the tone and the 'enough already' exasperated attitude. Excellent, powerful piece.
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re: Re: I'm Out
13th Feb 2014 11:18am
Thank you, Vee, I dig your enthusiasm. I'm indulging in writing some righteous rage, good for a clear out... Mind the shrapnel!
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Anonymous
13th Feb 2014 8:20am
Steam coming from your words......better be ware....powerful write!
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re: Re: I'm Out
13th Feb 2014 11:20am
Ha, you got it, Mourganna! Not quite safe yet, take cover...
Thank you, Wise One.
Thank you, Wise One.
Re: I'm Out
13th Feb 2014 8:02pm
Your piece strikes with a powerful cynicism
N resolve, outstandingly expressed!
N resolve, outstandingly expressed!
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