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I Painted a Love Scene
I sprawl myself across a sunset
That lies seductively in the evening sky
I blush the fair cheeks of a girl
Who waits with a twinkle in her eye
She waits under a cherry tree
In a soft bed of its pigmented blossoms
For her mischievous lover approaches
And though he wears a smirk, he is handsome
The lips I gently tint meet
In an embrace sweet as homemade cotton candy
Her own delicate flower I caress
And when he touches she's aroused so easily
As the sunset scurries away
Sight of me fades slowly into the shadows
Yet the young girl remembers fondly
And though her body is weary, she glows
(a personification of the color pink.. for the "If Colors Could Speak" comp)
That lies seductively in the evening sky
I blush the fair cheeks of a girl
Who waits with a twinkle in her eye
She waits under a cherry tree
In a soft bed of its pigmented blossoms
For her mischievous lover approaches
And though he wears a smirk, he is handsome
The lips I gently tint meet
In an embrace sweet as homemade cotton candy
Her own delicate flower I caress
And when he touches she's aroused so easily
As the sunset scurries away
Sight of me fades slowly into the shadows
Yet the young girl remembers fondly
And though her body is weary, she glows
(a personification of the color pink.. for the "If Colors Could Speak" comp)
Published 2nd Feb 2014
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2nd Feb 2014 5:23am
2nd Feb 2014 5:34am
Anonymous
- Edited 11th May 2018 11:47am
3rd Feb 2014 00:37am
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3rd Feb 2014 2:15am
3rd Feb 2014 2:18am
This is beautifully sensual in it's innocence and telling of becoming a woman :) much love Crim
3rd Feb 2014 2:19am
3rd Feb 2014 3:37am
You really did paint a love scene with this. Not a sex scene, a lie scene. It's all hints, glimpses and sensuality. The only thing I would change is the word 'For' to 'as' or something similar in the second stanza, but that's just personal preference, it still ties in to the style of the poem.
This is wonderfully written.
This is wonderfully written.
3rd Feb 2014 5:04am
Anonymous
3rd Feb 2014 9:38pm
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5th Feb 2014 10:31pm
5th Feb 2014 11:42pm
Anonymous
1st Mar 2014 4:56pm
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1st Mar 2014 11:50pm
I'm happy you think so... that was my intent with this piece:)
thank you xo
thank you xo
