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Yes - I Want Honest Criticism (Even If It Does Hurt)
". . .A bit lengthy. . ."
". . . You could perhaps say at least the same with a little less."
I can't help it.
The length.
The words.
I get lost.
And can't find my way out.
I know I ask for honest criticism.
But I never thought the length was a problem.
It's one thing-- One thing if it were for a competition.
That asked for a certain length.
A certain word count.
But this is-- This is my own personal poetry.
Did you judge me on that one piece?
Was that my only chance?
Better try better next time?
I feel as though I am being judged.
Judged for something I wrote.
I fixed the spelling errors that's one thing.
But long poems are my specialty.
That always have been.
I say what I want to say because I love words.
I say with alot of words because that's what the story calls for.
I'm sorry--
I shouldn't complain.
I just felt like there was something wrong with it.
Wrong with the words.
Wrong with the title.
Wrong with the story.
Wrong with my writing ability.
Wrong-- Wrong-- Wrong.
I was wrong.
Am I still wrong?
How about this poem?
Is it too long?
I'll never know anymore.
Please-- Someone tell me the boundries I must set for myself.
Instead of making me into a broken, paranoid bundle of a broken nerved mess.
Please tell me where I should stop.
Here?
Maybe here?
Is this good enough?
Because I do not know.
What is too long or too short?
All I know.
Is that, being critized for that
For that--
For that--
For that--
For that--
For that--
All I know is that.
Long or short?
Those words--
They really, really--
Hurt.
". . . You could perhaps say at least the same with a little less."
I can't help it.
The length.
The words.
I get lost.
And can't find my way out.
I know I ask for honest criticism.
But I never thought the length was a problem.
It's one thing-- One thing if it were for a competition.
That asked for a certain length.
A certain word count.
But this is-- This is my own personal poetry.
Did you judge me on that one piece?
Was that my only chance?
Better try better next time?
I feel as though I am being judged.
Judged for something I wrote.
I fixed the spelling errors that's one thing.
But long poems are my specialty.
That always have been.
I say what I want to say because I love words.
I say with alot of words because that's what the story calls for.
I'm sorry--
I shouldn't complain.
I just felt like there was something wrong with it.
Wrong with the words.
Wrong with the title.
Wrong with the story.
Wrong with my writing ability.
Wrong-- Wrong-- Wrong.
I was wrong.
Am I still wrong?
How about this poem?
Is it too long?
I'll never know anymore.
Please-- Someone tell me the boundries I must set for myself.
Instead of making me into a broken, paranoid bundle of a broken nerved mess.
Please tell me where I should stop.
Here?
Maybe here?
Is this good enough?
Because I do not know.
What is too long or too short?
All I know.
Is that, being critized for that
For that--
For that--
For that--
For that--
For that--
All I know is that.
Long or short?
Those words--
They really, really--
Hurt.
Published 27th Jan 2014
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Anonymous
- Edited 27th Jan 2014 8:51pm
27th Jan 2014 8:50pm
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Thanks, I've never been one to take criticism well mostly cause I was put down on my life. So when it involves actually doing something I love and being told it could've been done differently to make it better. I guess it makes me feel very self-concious.
Thank you though.
- Paige Rider
Thank you though.
- Paige Rider
27th Jan 2014 9:14pm
Write how you wish long..short whatever its yours. Your emotions..feelings.. pen.Screw anyone who tells you otherwise :)
28th Jan 2014 6:50am
Thank you, that's how I usually feel and the length of my poems never seemed to bother anyone before. It just caught me off guard I guess. Thank you nonetheless.
- Paige Rider
- Paige Rider
