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ambiguity of oral sex
A week after high school graduation, a group of my classmates drove to the
country, to a picnic area near a lake. it was the final summer of our youth.
Soon after, most of us young men would be conscripted into the Army, &
most of the girls would convert to the status of barefoot, pregnant housewives.
After a meal of hamburgers, hot dogs, homemade potato salad, & cold beer,
everyone ran to the lake, except for myself & a red-haired girl. I remember she
had freckles, that for some reason my mates found less attractive than the
pure cream skin of the other girls. my blooming poetic spirit enabled me to
realize that those freckles added another level of beauty to her face.
‘I’m going for a walk,’ she said, & looked at me for a minute before beginning
her stroll. I immediately followed. Shortly, we came to a lush patch of ground
under a broad shading tree.
With no warning, she said ‘take off your clothes,’ & quickly removed her sandals,
light top, & shorts. Somewhat hesitant, I took off my tee-shirt & shorts, but left
my briefs on. ‘You’re so fucking shy!’ It was the first time I’d heard a girl use that
word, & I was humorously shocked. She pulled them down my hips & legs, & I
lay on my back in the grass.
She seemed intrigued as she gazed at my erection; I wondered if she might mount
me. instead, she ran her fingertips gently down my length, as I shuddered. She
took my hardness in her fist, & lowered her mouth around it…
If this was a common blow job, it was cast in the aura of regal beauty, by virtue of
the sensitivity of the skin around the phallic root, & the extraordinary manipulation
of a girl’s mouth & tongue.
After some delirious moments, I told her that she had to stop, that I couldn’t
restrain myself. she uttered a low moan, like an animal preparing to feast. She
had driven me beyond discretion & decorum, as the creaming emissions of my
passion poured from my insides… I did something then that was deemed forbidden
after oral sex: I kissed her.
As the brilliant glow of our interlude faded, we simply lay there, side by side,
watching the sky…
Shortly thereafter, fate took us in different directions, & I never saw her again. But I
would always remember the wonder of our sensual adventure, & her freckles…
although despondent, that I never fucked her.
Published 12th Jan 2014
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12th Jan 2014 10:16am
Really really good
beautiful sensual
this is how erotica should be written
thankyou for posting john
beautiful sensual
this is how erotica should be written
thankyou for posting john
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12th Jan 2014 2:44pm
12th Jan 2014 3:04pm
A small token of pleasure's simplicity was her gift to you. Being embedded into the fabric of your memory was your gift to her. I love this. Yet, I'm a sucker, no pun intended, for romanticism. forget-me-not~ he regaled :)
12th Jan 2014 5:18pm
12th Jan 2014 7:18pm
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12th Jan 2014 8:30pm
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12th Jan 2014 10:02pm
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13th Jan 2014 1:04am
ewwww you didn't! say it ain't so John...lol
a wonderful story Sir! sweet musings about the one who slipped away :)
a wonderful story Sir! sweet musings about the one who slipped away :)
13th Jan 2014 5:38am
ha! I love it! nice work at bringing the not so distant past to life in full color. I enjoyed the wordplay and subtle foreshadowing. I can expound on this if you desire.
The last line is a smirker.
The last line is a smirker.
13th Jan 2014 6:00am
23rd May 2014 2:06pm
I never replied to this, huh?
foreshadowing - "lush piece of ground under a broad shading tree."
Whether intentional or not, this foreshadows a sexual encounter. magically metaphorical too.
word play - "you're so fucking shy!"
just shy of fucking...
There were other things that I noticed the first time I read it that are lost to me now.
I enjoyed this very much. both times.
foreshadowing - "lush piece of ground under a broad shading tree."
Whether intentional or not, this foreshadows a sexual encounter. magically metaphorical too.
word play - "you're so fucking shy!"
just shy of fucking...
There were other things that I noticed the first time I read it that are lost to me now.
I enjoyed this very much. both times.
13th Jan 2014 8:17am
Refreshed an old topic into a first-time venture, Feddeler. The title is a spoiler though...
13th Jan 2014 3:41pm
The common blow job
for the common erection
gets the uncommon kiss
A gift for the first time ...
A fine write!
for the common erection
gets the uncommon kiss
A gift for the first time ...
A fine write!
15th Jan 2014 2:20pm
Allow me to call you a killer,you just killed every poet,this is my favorite poem for today,nice to know you bro
16th Jan 2014 9:45pm
‘You’re so fucking shy!’ It was the first time I’d heard a girl use that
word, & I was humorously shocked. She pulled them down my hips & legs, & I
lay on my back in the grass.
She seemed intrigued as she gazed at my erection; I wondered if she might mount
me. instead, she ran her fingertips gently down my length, as I shuddered. She
took my hardness in her fist, & lowered her mouth around it…
If this was a common blow job, it was cast in the aura of regal beauty, by virtue of
the sensitivity of the skin around the phallic root, & the extraordinary manipulation
of a girl’s mouth & tongue.
After some delirious moments, I told her that she had to stop, that I couldn’t
restrain myself. she uttered a low moan, like an animal preparing to feast. She
had driven me beyond discretion & decorum, as the creaming emissions of my
passion poured from my insides… I did something then that was deemed forbidden
after oral sex: I kissed her.
Par excellent power of expression
with a deep regret
lingering for ever
as it was ur maiden incident
the f did not happen
she was perhaps
aware of her freckles
decent gal though
but congratulations so many have shared this incident now
are u a Libra sir
word, & I was humorously shocked. She pulled them down my hips & legs, & I
lay on my back in the grass.
She seemed intrigued as she gazed at my erection; I wondered if she might mount
me. instead, she ran her fingertips gently down my length, as I shuddered. She
took my hardness in her fist, & lowered her mouth around it…
If this was a common blow job, it was cast in the aura of regal beauty, by virtue of
the sensitivity of the skin around the phallic root, & the extraordinary manipulation
of a girl’s mouth & tongue.
After some delirious moments, I told her that she had to stop, that I couldn’t
restrain myself. she uttered a low moan, like an animal preparing to feast. She
had driven me beyond discretion & decorum, as the creaming emissions of my
passion poured from my insides… I did something then that was deemed forbidden
after oral sex: I kissed her.
Par excellent power of expression
with a deep regret
lingering for ever
as it was ur maiden incident
the f did not happen
she was perhaps
aware of her freckles
decent gal though
but congratulations so many have shared this incident now
are u a Libra sir
27th Jan 2014 11:40pm
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5th Feb 2014 7:55am
9th Feb 2014 6:41pm
This is wonderful. I have always wondered who else could see the beauty in seemingly meaningless encounters such as this. It touches me in an unexpected way.
3rd May 2014 6:35pm
26th Mar 2015 10:53pm
Those redheads..
Often your poetry leaves me speechless. Enchanted. You unfold stories so well that you take your readers to another world for a moment.
Often your poetry leaves me speechless. Enchanted. You unfold stories so well that you take your readers to another world for a moment.
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26th Mar 2015 11:24pm
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10th Jun 2016 3:35am
This is some wild wild erotic writing.
I sensed the power behind the imagery.
As I read this, I was able to watch a movie inside my head.
Great description! (y)
I sensed the power behind the imagery.
As I read this, I was able to watch a movie inside my head.
Great description! (y)
24th Jul 2016 6:33am
To see the beauty in what others toss away is rewarding in so many ways.....
Excellent write,John
Excellent write,John
