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The Circus
He thought that he would do her a favour. The delicacy of the night.
Her hairless pudding gaped. Confectionery of the gods.
His mouth spread the entree. She did not like that at all.
His hands seized her buttocks. To steady the target.
The great articulator. The agile serpent wagged.
Between the crust and the icing. Her brown sugar melted.
Saccharifying his tongue. She did not like that at all.
Thus fudged another rapture. To end this circus act.
Finished his mouth was glazed. He looked pleased but incomplete.
She thought to return the gesture. He worked hard, after all.
Her lips embraced the summit. As tight as she thought he pleased.
With a wave she gesticulated him. But he did not like that at all.
She suckled and smashed her face. Mad at the gristly phallus.
He feigned a sigh of pleasure. His strength crept down his legs.
She pulled, rode her tongue on the crest. He did not like that at all.
So he sighed and shot limpid. To end this circus act.
Finished, they lay together. Wrapped in blanket and arms.
They imagined they pleased each other. Without pleasing themselves.
Finished but incomplete. For the best was yet to come.
When the cold came with the dawn. And the perfect embrace of lovers.
Her hairless pudding gaped. Confectionery of the gods.
His mouth spread the entree. She did not like that at all.
His hands seized her buttocks. To steady the target.
The great articulator. The agile serpent wagged.
Between the crust and the icing. Her brown sugar melted.
Saccharifying his tongue. She did not like that at all.
Thus fudged another rapture. To end this circus act.
Finished his mouth was glazed. He looked pleased but incomplete.
She thought to return the gesture. He worked hard, after all.
Her lips embraced the summit. As tight as she thought he pleased.
With a wave she gesticulated him. But he did not like that at all.
She suckled and smashed her face. Mad at the gristly phallus.
He feigned a sigh of pleasure. His strength crept down his legs.
She pulled, rode her tongue on the crest. He did not like that at all.
So he sighed and shot limpid. To end this circus act.
Finished, they lay together. Wrapped in blanket and arms.
They imagined they pleased each other. Without pleasing themselves.
Finished but incomplete. For the best was yet to come.
When the cold came with the dawn. And the perfect embrace of lovers.
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Re: The Circus
3rd Jan 2014 11:06am
Nd ur erotica is more sensual..nd not flesy...but to adore...grt expericance...
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3rd Jan 2014 12:30pm
this is a unique way of presenting reciprocal oral sex. they seemed to enjoy the giving rather than the receiving, but perhaps only felt obliged...
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3rd Jan 2014 12:59pm
It is a pleasure to 'meet' you, JohnFeddeler. And thank you. I felt rather disturbed with their discontent because it was so given with love ...
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3rd Jan 2014 5:19pm
I like the way you combine the geometry and content. 5 regular stanzas of 4 lines each with a torrent of lirism... Shape and content allied.
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4th Jan 2014 6:03am
Thank you, Celino. When I started writing poetry here in DU, I wrote it in the form of a 2-sentence line, with 4 lines per stanza. I wondered how that would work with more poetry so I keep using it. :)
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4th Jan 2014 4:44am
I like this form of poetry, very well structured, with some fantasy to break the rigidity of the structure. And a very nice lyrism inside! And the realism of the situation!
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4th Jan 2014 6:07am
Thank you, malin. I keep using this particular form, which came as I wrote my first poem here in DU. I still have to understand this particular form, or structure.
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5th Jan 2014 5:04pm
You captured the delightful awkwardness of lovers before they find their perfect embrace - perfect - sometimes you need the quiet after the storm to ride the hurricane - and wonderfully louche as ever ms. Absinthe
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6th Jan 2014 12:08pm
I had to look up "louche" - you mean sordid! Yes! Earthy!
Thank you, whale. :)
Thank you, whale. :)
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6th Jan 2014 1:04pm
Yeah but also it's the name for when the water hits the absinthe and makes it creamy and smooth without softening the kick
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Oh is it! I don't drink it (or much at all), I just write it. :)
ETA: Or should I try it?
ETA: Or should I try it?
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6th Jan 2014 1:58pm
when you go to Ibiza the absinthe there (mari mayans) is the one I created - it is fierce and slightly hallucinogenic - I think you have these qualities naturally and so I aver that ms. absinthe needs to never drink absinthe - u r perfect as u r
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6th Jan 2014 2:27pm
This is so intriguing! You have worked with Mari Mayans? There is absinthe in the shops here but my husband told me not to get it. I took the asti instead! ;)
However, lately, I have slight (not so serious but uncomfortable) problems with alcohol and thus only mostly drink very young wine (my preference being the coconut palm wine that is just tapped and fermenting 24-48 hours).
Thank you, whale, I understand now your comment "louche" have more profound meaning. :)
However, lately, I have slight (not so serious but uncomfortable) problems with alcohol and thus only mostly drink very young wine (my preference being the coconut palm wine that is just tapped and fermenting 24-48 hours).
Thank you, whale, I understand now your comment "louche" have more profound meaning. :)
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6th Jan 2014 2:36pm
You must be somewhere beautiful to be drinking that and yes your husband is right ;)
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10th Jan 2014 3:37pm
Thank you, Tim - "innocence to a very passionate moment", yes I kind of like that, in what I read and what I write ... :)