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Fighting Talk
You started this... I dare
you to finish me.
I'm arched, pushed
up against your glower.
You grab my hair and pull
my intentions back, growl
blazed postures up
my bitten neck.
Hearing jagged breaths, here
in parted thighs — you stroke
my anticipations and crush
my lips with yours.
Hot clenched gasps,
your hand finds taut promises,
mine is tensed around rigid
rage. This could be yours
for the taking. Escalated
wilder senses, these urgent
altercations
take us over harder.
We ride through battle cries,
fall into a fevered lock
— your victor's thrust
finds mine — we roar triumph.
Posted in the Swear to Shake It Up competition
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Re: Fighting Talk
27th Dec 2013 2:00am
It's rare to find this kind of raw strength so well-stated in poetry like this. Why share the spoils of victory with anyone other than an equal? There are needs within the needs that must be acknowledged. Sometimes I have issues with how I write what might be traditionally seen as erotica, but I think you've struck a perfect balance. Rare beast. Very excellent.
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re: Re: Fighting Talk
27th Dec 2013 11:01am
Well, Ben, that's two mentions of 'rare' from you, and I thank you for that. It is true, also, that I rarely venture into erotica, so I'm relieved and pleased my efforts translated into a satisfactory read.
Needs within needs, yes, that what drives the heat, does it not?
Thank you for your very thoughtful and generous comments...
Needs within needs, yes, that what drives the heat, does it not?
Thank you for your very thoughtful and generous comments...
Re: Fighting Talk
27th Dec 2013 2:11am
:) whoa horsy!!
awesome write
very...how do you say...um...erotic
good luck in the comp n
awesome write
very...how do you say...um...erotic
good luck in the comp n
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re: Re: Fighting Talk
27th Dec 2013 11:03am
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Anonymous
27th Dec 2013 4:02am
Atakti, I read this couple of times and each time i walked away feeling the urgency of the desire more intensely with each read.
As some of us know much too well, it's a rare find to find true erotica and I must say this certainly classifies as one.
As some of us know much too well, it's a rare find to find true erotica and I must say this certainly classifies as one.

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re: Re: Fighting Talk
27th Dec 2013 11:07am
Vee, your comment leaves me buoyant, because I know you've written well in this genre. Your recognition of my erotic ink makes me happy, thank you...
Re: Fighting Talk
Anonymous
27th Dec 2013 7:37am
Wow, girl ... when you dive in, you dive ALL the way in... intense, physical, passionate, but never vulgar.
Well done, you. Not going to wish you luck - you don't need it - you have mad skilzzz...
Well done, you. Not going to wish you luck - you don't need it - you have mad skilzzz...

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re: Re: Fighting Talk
27th Dec 2013 11:11am
I'll happily accept that list of words, Kitten, coming from a poet skilled in sensual writing - thank you.
As for the comp, this is one of those times where I feel I already won, irrelevant of getting the trophy or not... The comps inspire in their best forms.
As for the comp, this is one of those times where I feel I already won, irrelevant of getting the trophy or not... The comps inspire in their best forms.
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27th Dec 2013 9:24am
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27th Dec 2013 11:13am
Ah whale, thank you for reading, and your comments! Glad to see another solid member join the DU community.
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Anonymous
27th Dec 2013 2:47pm
like blowin' 'da whistle rM

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28th Dec 2013 7:50pm
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Anonymous
27th Dec 2013 7:12pm
Atakti you've succeeded in your conquest of my absolute adoration. I'd never have expected such a powerfully written work of erotic passion from your pen. This is truly art, which from you I expect..but not in this genre..I'm genuinely stunned. I'm all shook up..

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re: Re: Fighting Talk
28th Dec 2013 7:53pm
Ah, Tom, you makin' me blush. Thank you for the list add and your very generous thoughts.
:)
:)
Re: Fighting Talk
Anonymous
27th Dec 2013 8:52pm
Could almost imagine steamy windows there....
haha
haha

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re: Re: Fighting Talk
28th Dec 2013 7:53pm
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28th Dec 2013 7:55pm
*smile*
Good to see the survivor instincts kickin' in there, Jake... Thanks so much for your creative comments!
Good to see the survivor instincts kickin' in there, Jake... Thanks so much for your creative comments!
Re: Fighting Talk
28th Dec 2013 2:59pm
Powerfully passionate!
Erotica expressed with such elegance and finesse!
A very well-done,to you, my Friend!
Erotica expressed with such elegance and finesse!
A very well-done,to you, my Friend!
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re: Re: Fighting Talk
28th Dec 2013 7:57pm
Ah, cheers, Dark Enchantress, for reading and finding elegance in my scribblings. I truly appreciate your support!
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Re: Fighting Talk
29th Dec 2013 1:23pm
Ataki, first time I'm reading an erotic ink from you
N I must say...impressive, hot, tense, passionate...yup
I need more! lol
N I must say...impressive, hot, tense, passionate...yup
I need more! lol
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re: Re: Fighting Talk
30th Dec 2013 11:34am
Pleased it pleased you... Let's see when the mood takes my ink, hmm?
Thank you for stopping by!
Thank you for stopping by!
Re: Fighting Talk
9th Jan 2014 5:37am
WOW Atakti you threw me a curve ball with this one! A beautiful write, thanks for sharing, enjoyed it.
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re: Re: Fighting Talk
9th Jan 2014 7:50pm
Re: Fighting Talk
Give the guy a beer.... ah-humm. Well, you certainly nailed him... it... the poem, it's very goooood! No, that's an understatement, it's fucking excellence, intense with great downward flow... I have nothing more to say. [smirk]
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re: Re: Fighting Talk
24th Apr 2014 4:28pm
Haha, your comments are priceless. This must have caught you off guard...
Thank you for the smirk.
;)
Thank you for the smirk.
;)