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Dreaming away
Standing by the school
Church or school
My thoughts were church
He said a school
Always been a school
His school
He wasn't alone
It couldn't be that simple
She was in the car
Introduced
Feeling uneasy
She looked uninterested
We all walked the ground
My own guided tour
Made to wear the uniform
Talked of the weather and laughed
about place names I'd left behind.
Church or school
My thoughts were church
He said a school
Always been a school
His school
He wasn't alone
It couldn't be that simple
She was in the car
Introduced
Feeling uneasy
She looked uninterested
We all walked the ground
My own guided tour
Made to wear the uniform
Talked of the weather and laughed
about place names I'd left behind.
Published 24th Dec 2013
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Anonymous
24th Dec 2013 6:45am
awkward moments...
24th Dec 2013 6:51am
Weird dream
Awkward moments
Nothing straightforward
The past
Where I've come from
Revisited
My take on the dream
Awkward moments
Nothing straightforward
The past
Where I've come from
Revisited
My take on the dream
24th Dec 2013 7:03am
Extremely deep and heavy Ms Rose. To Echo Ms Petit. Awkward to say the least. Even a little disturbing. Powerful write M'dear. Thank you.
24th Dec 2013 7:33am
Just how I remembered it
Still say it was a church
I know a church when I dream one xD
Thankyou sway
Still say it was a church
I know a church when I dream one xD
Thankyou sway
24th Dec 2013 8:07am
Intriguing piece, Rose! I've always wanted to write down my dreams...never have thus far...except waking dreams of course :)
24th Dec 2013 8:13am
thankyou gahddess
i dont remember most obviously
but some just stick around :)
i dont remember most obviously
but some just stick around :)
24th Dec 2013 8:17am
I seem to be always on the move in mine...either room to room in a labyrinth like house or traveling from place to place
24th Dec 2013 8:50am
24th Dec 2013 10:57am
I read it as repression at a Catholic school thus the duality of the building ... Your getting the tour of Our Lady of the Merciless, Sister Mary Agony the principal, along with your dad. Mom stayed in the car - maybe to smoke a cigarette ... the uniform is conformity which you'll come to hate.
LSP
LSP
24th Dec 2013 12:44pm
great thinking LSP
not quite right but amazing thinking :)
thankyou for observation
not quite right but amazing thinking :)
thankyou for observation
