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Ink Heart
Sapphire skies
cry ink stained rain
tourniquet heart
seeking solace
where there is none
to be found
in your arms
I shelter
in your word
I hide
poetic dreamer
with coca cola eyes
slipping into my mind
showing me vistas
not dreamt of
by this weary mind
making me creamy inside
seducing my cold core
turning it molten
you've lit my fire
with your love
arson fingers
blazing a trail
down my spine
to my hot spots
fingering my mind
with your poetic truth
in supplication
I present myself
cry ink stained rain
tourniquet heart
seeking solace
where there is none
to be found
in your arms
I shelter
in your word
I hide
poetic dreamer
with coca cola eyes
slipping into my mind
showing me vistas
not dreamt of
by this weary mind
making me creamy inside
seducing my cold core
turning it molten
you've lit my fire
with your love
arson fingers
blazing a trail
down my spine
to my hot spots
fingering my mind
with your poetic truth
in supplication
I present myself
Published 18th Dec 2013
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Anonymous
18th Dec 2013 4:12pm
Crim,
HOT!!! I've had to open the window a bit on this cold day after this one! ; ) Enjoyed!!!
tornado
HOT!!! I've had to open the window a bit on this cold day after this one! ; ) Enjoyed!!!
tornado
18th Dec 2013 4:21pm
And presented in molten silk form, your ink drips passion the mind can dine on :) Lovely and provocative*
18th Dec 2013 4:31pm
18th Dec 2013 5:01pm
18th Dec 2013 5:03pm
Sipping from the fountain of arson eyes
every dream steaming inside you
revealing mirror messages
The poet is easily you
Excellent Crim
every dream steaming inside you
revealing mirror messages
The poet is easily you
Excellent Crim
18th Dec 2013 5:03pm
18th Dec 2013 5:13pm
oh my goodness, this is an awesome write. you so nailed the art of melting words and verses together for a perfect flow and uninterrupted movement and feeling. I really, really love this part:
"in your arms
I shelter
in your word
I hide"
awesome!!
"in your arms
I shelter
in your word
I hide"
awesome!!
18th Dec 2013 5:43pm
...sometimes the ink's emotions can be so powerful that it prints itself on your heart, like a tattoo...
Seductive pen, Crim....Xo
Seductive pen, Crim....Xo
18th Dec 2013 7:03pm
18th Dec 2013 7:46pm
u produce true class in this write..
I wish I could touch a person like the poet here has done to u...
coming to ur write,
the first stanza speaks a lot...but the one that caught me the most was the 'coca cola eyes' line....
it seems less darker than ur usual writes but delightful as always....
keep Rollin
cyanide...
I wish I could touch a person like the poet here has done to u...
coming to ur write,
the first stanza speaks a lot...but the one that caught me the most was the 'coca cola eyes' line....
it seems less darker than ur usual writes but delightful as always....
keep Rollin
cyanide...
Anonymous
18th Dec 2013 10:07pm
The passion of the mental dance burns hot and you captured the essence here, Crim! Nice write ;-) peace n love
Miki
Miki
18th Dec 2013 10:35pm
making me creamy inside
seducing my cold core
turning it molten
you've lit my fire
with your love
nice cold to hot flare
and orgasms are for what
all women care
seducing my cold core
turning it molten
you've lit my fire
with your love
nice cold to hot flare
and orgasms are for what
all women care
18th Dec 2013 11:29pm
Know that is pure poetic heaven! You draw the reader straight in and capture every bit of this romantic piece. So sexy are the words. My friend I'm still clapping on your creativity.
18th Dec 2013 11:49pm
Anonymous
19th Dec 2013 2:52am
wow Brenda, this is super hot, each line dripping with sexuality and desire.
19th Dec 2013 9:38am
I find romance here as well as lust, Crim. 'coca cola eyes' must be very dark, & also moist...
Anonymous
19th Dec 2013 1:38pm
Lovely romance and lustily beautiful sensuous desire, Bren
I'm really in awe of your softer side (you know I love the hard side <3) but this is magic! More? please
I'm really in awe of your softer side (you know I love the hard side <3) but this is magic! More? please
Anonymous
19th Dec 2013 4:07pm
Very beautiful ink.....very sexy, romantic. Really enjoyed this. :)
20th Dec 2013 9:18pm
20th Dec 2013 10:24pm
youre one bad bitch Crim. its been fun to watch you rise. hit that shit til it soaks your proverbial bed
4th Jan 2014 7:06am
Wow, this is an awesome write, Crim!
One can taste the words you weave, and a sexy bite to it as always :)
One can taste the words you weave, and a sexy bite to it as always :)
6th Jan 2014 9:54pm
8th Jan 2014 11:23am
9th Jan 2014 7:35pm
Can't believe i missed this, but since I earn missing u I stopper by... This was sensually beautiful n made me ache too becuz damn I missed ur ink! Come back sweetie :(
27th Jan 2014 00:46am
Wow, I'm glad I stumbled upon this. Your writing style is like a mix between Plath, Dickenson, and Amy Lee. My favorite part is "poetic dreamer with coca cola eyes", the comparison is brilliant. I'm jealous. This is really really good.
28th Jan 2014 00:40am
Anonymous
2nd Feb 2014 00:13am
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3rd Feb 2014 11:15am
This is super cool! The structure is punchy, yet you've managed to give the poem a really nice soothing and sensual rhythm. Skilfully crafted and the lines you weave are killer.
"poetic dreamer
with coca cola eyes
slipping into my mind..." so sweet it will rot our teeth.
Awesome write, Crim!
"poetic dreamer
with coca cola eyes
slipping into my mind..." so sweet it will rot our teeth.
Awesome write, Crim!
13th Feb 2014 9:23am
20th Feb 2014 3:06am
Painting such emotion against a colorful enough background in detail with a fine brush.
