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BASH BASH BASH
No thinking about it,
there could be orange frogs,
dead hookers
and a whole host of impossible
characters writhing around
in this fast paced cesspit.
I think I'm going blind,
but it could be worse,
I could be one of those truly
undeniably dull fuckers
who comment on your poetry
with more poetry.
Still there's much worse than that.
Leave the dead hookers
out of it.
Sorry kids, did you want
some sense.
Nope.
Not a chance.
Bash Bash Bash.
More wine please...
Of course, I'm on my own.
I'll roll my own fucking cigarette then.
The stomach flips,
the mind jars.
This is 5 am.
The dead hookers
are fast asleep.
I, unfortunately
for you,
am not.
there could be orange frogs,
dead hookers
and a whole host of impossible
characters writhing around
in this fast paced cesspit.
I think I'm going blind,
but it could be worse,
I could be one of those truly
undeniably dull fuckers
who comment on your poetry
with more poetry.
Still there's much worse than that.
Leave the dead hookers
out of it.
Sorry kids, did you want
some sense.
Nope.
Not a chance.
Bash Bash Bash.
More wine please...
Of course, I'm on my own.
I'll roll my own fucking cigarette then.
The stomach flips,
the mind jars.
This is 5 am.
The dead hookers
are fast asleep.
I, unfortunately
for you,
am not.
Published 5th Feb 2011
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5th Feb 2011 5:11am
I guess that's not your cup of tea
or perhaps more accurately your brand of red wine
but with every swallow I know you know the reason
you filled your cup in the first place
because there are always going to be the fuckers like me
who push your buttons
Just because you've told them how
or perhaps more accurately your brand of red wine
but with every swallow I know you know the reason
you filled your cup in the first place
because there are always going to be the fuckers like me
who push your buttons
Just because you've told them how
5th Feb 2011 8:58am
on "I'm one dull motherfucker":
I think if you took out "why" in line 4 and maybe take out the "to" at the end of the poem, you might have something here. Also commas after "perhaps" and "accurately" unless you break the lines for grammatical pause.
I think if you took out "why" in line 4 and maybe take out the "to" at the end of the poem, you might have something here. Also commas after "perhaps" and "accurately" unless you break the lines for grammatical pause.
5th Feb 2011 10:04am
5th Feb 2011 5:34pm
I'm so not sure what to make of it, all I know is it's angry, warped and it works.
9th Feb 2011 1:10pm
I will say. Love your own and own life. The healthiest bash and perhaps the most ideal bash in the world. There is a sense called psychic consciousness.
