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the taste of her blood
she was so innocent
she was so beautiful
she looked delicious
she always left at night
i always watched her in the dark alley
the poor and fragile creature
my eyes burning with the blood lust
silently i moved
the shadows as my cover
i give her smooth neck a slight sniff
quickly cover her mouth and bite her throat
my fangs sinking slowly to the flow of her blood
when i finally reach it it begins to fill my mouth
gulp after gulp
slowly taking her life away
her attempted screams fade
her glistening eyes shut
her breath slowly ceases
i remove my hand
take in the last drop
the sweet taste of her blood
i wish it hadn't ended
her body lays there lifeless
i kiss her cheek
leave her body laying peacefully
i attend her funeral
leave the fresh rose
she may be dead
but her blood was the best
she was so beautiful
she looked delicious
she always left at night
i always watched her in the dark alley
the poor and fragile creature
my eyes burning with the blood lust
silently i moved
the shadows as my cover
i give her smooth neck a slight sniff
quickly cover her mouth and bite her throat
my fangs sinking slowly to the flow of her blood
when i finally reach it it begins to fill my mouth
gulp after gulp
slowly taking her life away
her attempted screams fade
her glistening eyes shut
her breath slowly ceases
i remove my hand
take in the last drop
the sweet taste of her blood
i wish it hadn't ended
her body lays there lifeless
i kiss her cheek
leave her body laying peacefully
i attend her funeral
leave the fresh rose
she may be dead
but her blood was the best
Published 12th Dec 2013
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12th Dec 2013 3:05am
Haha, I love it! Mysteriously morbid, vampiric and sensual and hilarious.
"Her body lays there lifeless, I kiss her cheek."
"She may be dead, but her blood was the best."
My two favorite lines. :).
Oooh, but I would really like to hear more about how the blood tasted as it flowed down the narrator's gullet, was it warm, cold, sweet, sour, salty, spicy? I want to know. Hmm.. Or perhaps you could channel the woman's innocence into her blood, or he could taste her last meal? I don't know, haha, I'm just really interested on where you could go with this, on how you can make the reader taste the blood. :).
"Her body lays there lifeless, I kiss her cheek."
"She may be dead, but her blood was the best."
My two favorite lines. :).
Oooh, but I would really like to hear more about how the blood tasted as it flowed down the narrator's gullet, was it warm, cold, sweet, sour, salty, spicy? I want to know. Hmm.. Or perhaps you could channel the woman's innocence into her blood, or he could taste her last meal? I don't know, haha, I'm just really interested on where you could go with this, on how you can make the reader taste the blood. :).
12th Dec 2013 3:11am
im thinking about editing it to put in more detail to set the feelings more
14th Jan 2014 3:28pm
14th Jan 2014 9:44pm
