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A Real Vampire
A real vampire,
It's not blood he seeks
But your love he eats.
He doesn't come in the dead of night
He walks up to you in broad daylight
Introduces himself so charming.
No clue to you,
It's your defenses
He's disarming.
A real vampire,
Feeds off your soul and energy
Taking and taking never giving.
Not looking like an enemy.
I trust him,
After all he's a friend to me
Until one day you look in the mirror,
It's not the vampire that's vanished
But you that has disappeared.
A real vampire,
You will never see his fangs
Never feel his stick.
He will drink you dry
And then say goodbye
Leaving you love sick.
It's not blood he seeks
But your love he eats.
He doesn't come in the dead of night
He walks up to you in broad daylight
Introduces himself so charming.
No clue to you,
It's your defenses
He's disarming.
A real vampire,
Feeds off your soul and energy
Taking and taking never giving.
Not looking like an enemy.
I trust him,
After all he's a friend to me
Until one day you look in the mirror,
It's not the vampire that's vanished
But you that has disappeared.
A real vampire,
You will never see his fangs
Never feel his stick.
He will drink you dry
And then say goodbye
Leaving you love sick.
Published 3rd Feb 2011
| Edited 4th Feb 2011
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4th Feb 2011 1:44am
interestingly morbid yet romantic!
the thing that i would change is the "he" and instead of that i would write they so as to avoid being sexist
the thing that i would change is the "he" and instead of that i would write they so as to avoid being sexist
4th Feb 2011 1:46am
4th Feb 2011 2:08am
I agree with Opheliac but other than that I think this is rather epic, I love your view on the old 'Vampy' tale. Nice, very nice, Crimsin.
4th Feb 2011 2:11am
Anonymous
20th Feb 2011 2:15am
And especially the ending! I think the word 'he' is fine, contradicting the other two comments, since vampires are normally perceived as 'he's' and a female vampire wouldn't necessarily leave you love sick if this was a self poem unless your sexual views were different (which is fine..).
I'll never think of 'Twilight' vampires the same now. They are fairies anyway.
Reading list material, dear.
I'll never think of 'Twilight' vampires the same now. They are fairies anyway.
Reading list material, dear.
20th Feb 2011 2:32am
No i'm straight..and believe in these type of vampires..thank you again for commenting and adding it to your reading list..peace Crim :)
27th Feb 2011 11:40pm
I love how u turn a vampire into a regular person metaphorically bc its so true! Thts the true tale of the vampire!
28th Feb 2011 00:57am
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31st Mar 2011 9:23pm
I am strongly anti twilight so dont think Of me being a total ass here but im glad there is nothing refrencing to twilight and i give you kudos because the legend of vampires and werewolves is practically dead because of ghat f*cking book i could rant on that sh*t for hours and maybe days if i include the f*cking fans and so called actors and actresses. Anyway love the poem!
31st Mar 2011 9:32pm
thank you for the kind comment..I agree with you about the myths.. real vampires are people who suck the life out of you..peace Crim
6th Jan 2012 10:51am
crim....this is such a lovely piece...i would completely second miranda's thought here....a good write indeed...well done
4th Jun 2012 1:04am
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