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Another Re-Write
[center]I will be re-writing CraicDealer(lepperochan)'s poem Better to burn out
[url]http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/110432-better-to-burn-out/[/url]
Letting Go
The skin of our palms,
no longer tingle.
The touch no longer sends
that electric sizzle.
A proof to us,
that love does fade
It has become nothing but,
empty sex.
It's just... not...
the same.
We have tied each other,
with suffocating chains.
Innocently, we thought,
this affection, would
have lasted for years.
Naive.
Though I've tried by best to
rekindle that flame.
No matter what I do,
I know that inner warmth,
will never be the same.
So, just as the winds of
love,
pushed us together at the
mountain edge,
I'm letting you go myself.
I break your connection to
me.
You're still young, be free.
I'm happy, just to be able
to see,
you,
just,
be. [/center]
[url]http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/110432-better-to-burn-out/[/url]
Letting Go
The skin of our palms,
no longer tingle.
The touch no longer sends
that electric sizzle.
A proof to us,
that love does fade
It has become nothing but,
empty sex.
It's just... not...
the same.
We have tied each other,
with suffocating chains.
Innocently, we thought,
this affection, would
have lasted for years.
Naive.
Though I've tried by best to
rekindle that flame.
No matter what I do,
I know that inner warmth,
will never be the same.
So, just as the winds of
love,
pushed us together at the
mountain edge,
I'm letting you go myself.
I break your connection to
me.
You're still young, be free.
I'm happy, just to be able
to see,
you,
just,
be. [/center]
Published 4th Dec 2013
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5th Dec 2013 1:51am
5th Dec 2013 6:21am
wow... thank you...
I haven't been around as much as I should this pass month.
and I probably will be too busy this coming year.
but I'm hearing you say that.
Gives me confidence that I'd always be welcomed back.
I haven't been around as much as I should this pass month.
and I probably will be too busy this coming year.
but I'm hearing you say that.
Gives me confidence that I'd always be welcomed back.
5th Dec 2013 9:03am
6th Dec 2013 7:36am
