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The author encourages honest critique.
5th Dec 2013 2:45pm
Hey, poets! I remain stunned to read no comment, nor like. Is it so bad as you remain apathetic there? Do you agree at least that the picture is beautiful and the eyes of my love too!
This is the third test for graphical poems. I wish to do more graphical than here, but if nobody likes, perhaps I have to forget this way! Anybody is not Mallarmé, it is true, and me the first!
This is the third test for graphical poems. I wish to do more graphical than here, but if nobody likes, perhaps I have to forget this way! Anybody is not Mallarmé, it is true, and me the first!
5th Dec 2013 8:25pm
5th Dec 2013 8:28pm
Woah, a comment! Thank you so much Wings for your comment, nice and helpful...
5th Dec 2013 8:50pm
Oh just for other potential commentators, a negative comment should be helpful for me, too!
Anonymous
6th Dec 2013 2:33am
Malin, i think what you're conveying is so short and precise that you can easily turn this into haiku 5-7-5 format and the result in my opinion will have more of an impact.
If you decide to use it as haiku, i would take the last sentence and put it in the middle and make the mddle sentence as the last.
If you decide to use it as haiku, i would take the last sentence and put it in the middle and make the mddle sentence as the last.
6th Dec 2013 3:35am
Thank you so much for your comment, Vee. Then, I'll try an Haiku version as you suggest and I'll come inside the Hiaku mystery!
