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Danger At Midnight
Do you hear what I hear
the sound of screams
do you see what I see
this blasphemy
foot steps on the stairs
danger drawing near
bloody tears
runing down my face
at an even pace
I turn to see
who will kill me
the sound of screams
do you see what I see
this blasphemy
foot steps on the stairs
danger drawing near
bloody tears
runing down my face
at an even pace
I turn to see
who will kill me
Published 29th Jan 2011
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29th Jan 2011 7:23pm
This poem was enticing. It took me by surprise. It was like watching a horror film. Simply perfect. Thanks for the treat.
29th Jan 2011 8:35pm
31st Jan 2011 9:00pm
This read well, but had a awkward rhyming sequence. i am not sure if you meant to rhyme it, or whether it fell together that way. I like structure, but I was really taken in with the odd structure.
I would have liked you to have expanded on the:
Do you hear
Do you see
(Do you feel)
(Do you taste)
(Do you want)
(Do you know)
the list is endless, but you could easily expand this if you choose to,
regards,
Hooded
I would have liked you to have expanded on the:
Do you hear
Do you see
(Do you feel)
(Do you taste)
(Do you want)
(Do you know)
the list is endless, but you could easily expand this if you choose to,
regards,
Hooded
3rd Feb 2011 4:38pm
and i know i could of but this was just the way it played out in my mind :)
5th Feb 2011 11:30am
