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'Wind Gusts'
You're like the wind...
I can feel you
yet, can't grasp you...
You're like the rain
jettisoning in sprinkling mists
left to lie delicately upon flowers
as dew...
united petals, and drops kiss
You shine like the sun...
on a bright summer's day
you are everything, and anything
but, no matter what I say...
you've proven to be quite elusive
like the wind my love, though
silently I pray you'll always stay
rather than be like the wind
simply blowing away...
I can feel you
yet, can't grasp you...
You're like the rain
jettisoning in sprinkling mists
left to lie delicately upon flowers
as dew...
united petals, and drops kiss
You shine like the sun...
on a bright summer's day
you are everything, and anything
but, no matter what I say...
you've proven to be quite elusive
like the wind my love, though
silently I pray you'll always stay
rather than be like the wind
simply blowing away...
Published 14th Nov 2013
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Anonymous
14th Nov 2013 3:53pm
ahh... great closing lines. Breath her in, Poe.
14th Nov 2013 4:23pm
Ok...mmmmmmmm you smell wonderously
lovely! lol... Thank you my friend, I'm so truly grateful for you! :)
lovely! lol... Thank you my friend, I'm so truly grateful for you! :)
14th Nov 2013 4:57pm
14th Nov 2013 5:14pm
Aaaaawwww thank you sweetheart! I'm touched u have blessed my page with your presence, n I promise to return the favor :)
14th Nov 2013 8:33pm
14th Nov 2013 10:49pm
I plead the fifth on the grounds you might become a raging 'storm' n CUM all across my borders lmao... Still, it's possible lol... Thank u my dear Red one, much love n peace to ya sweetie :)
I love the nature metaphors you used!
They're so suitable for describing
tender feelings towards a woman.
May she be like a tornado,
you safely in her eye ...
They're so suitable for describing
tender feelings towards a woman.
May she be like a tornado,
you safely in her eye ...
14th Nov 2013 10:50pm
Wow, so clever u are! "She a tornado, me safely in her 'eye" loved that!! thank you precious heart, appreciate you always! :)
14th Nov 2013 10:10pm
14th Nov 2013 10:51pm
Aaaaawwww well thank you, I'm blushing now! lol
Appreciate ur support lady :)
Appreciate ur support lady :)
14th Nov 2013 10:38pm
14th Nov 2013 10:52pm
14th Nov 2013 11:08pm
15th Nov 2013 5:16am
Thanks bro! That's a very wonderful comment, I'm deeply grateful for it n all of ur support :)
15th Nov 2013 2:16am
This is quite lovely and touching PIKM, somethings are so hard to hold on to no matter how hard we grasp. I really like this :)
15th Nov 2013 5:39pm
Thank you, funny thing is
No matter what heart spills I still
get who I want to feel it enough
to wanna come to me... Appreciate you
No matter what heart spills I still
get who I want to feel it enough
to wanna come to me... Appreciate you
Anonymous
15th Nov 2013 7:44am
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15th Nov 2013 5:40pm
15th Nov 2013 2:41pm
Your metaphors are sick! Man love your work and your grind. Time for you my friend to start thinking about bigger opportunities and display your work for the whole world to see. God bless you with talent so know it's high time you bless the world. Great job on this piece as always...
15th Nov 2013 5:43pm
Thank you bro! Trust n believe I know n I have done more than you realize... I'm a 3 times published author, STILL it hasn't equalled financial success though! lol appreciate u always bro! :)
15th Nov 2013 3:12pm
beautiful .... love the metaphors... I can really relate to it man.. thank you for sharing ...
cyanide...
cyanide...
15th Nov 2013 5:44pm
15th Nov 2013 3:54pm
this was captivating and truly beautiful..love the first stanza, Bravo!!!
15th Nov 2013 5:47pm
Aaaaawwww c'mere, gotta big ole wet kiss I wanna plant
on that sweet sweet mouth! lol appreciate ya Purdy lil lady :)
on that sweet sweet mouth! lol appreciate ya Purdy lil lady :)
15th Nov 2013 10:18pm
the varying rhyme scheme and lines in each stanza worked quite well with the write for it reflects the uneven quality of weather. Some of the best romantic poems here, especially with the guys touch on mother nature---and you are surely in their ranks.
16th Nov 2013 00:07am
Thanks bro! Truly humbled n honored by your words
I appreciate you always bro. :)
I appreciate you always bro. :)
Anonymous
16th Nov 2013 5:12am
You do good when you write pretty. always among your best.
16th Nov 2013 5:14am
Thank you, I'd like think I'm good in all my
endeavors, but what'll I know? lol
Appreciate ur gentle comment :)
endeavors, but what'll I know? lol
Appreciate ur gentle comment :)
16th Nov 2013 5:19am
16th Nov 2013 5:25am
You must be trying to get my face FROZEN
in a smile! lol... Seriously, you are soooo sweet. Thank you lady C. :)
in a smile! lol... Seriously, you are soooo sweet. Thank you lady C. :)
16th Nov 2013 6:15am
16th Nov 2013 12:41pm
Aaaaaawwwww.... Thank you sweetness!
I'm grateful for your support truly n always :)
I'm grateful for your support truly n always :)
17th Nov 2013 7:36am
17th Nov 2013 2:02pm
Gosh what a very sweet comment! Many thanks to you
I'm happy you liked n appreciate you blessing my page
with your thoughts :)
I'm happy you liked n appreciate you blessing my page
with your thoughts :)
17th Nov 2013 5:06pm
17th Nov 2013 5:11pm
