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Hard Hitter
Rainbow flavored nothingness
candy coated bullshit
chokes and suffocates
my fire brewing under the surface
Crimsin is taking control
fuck your broken heart
suck it up bitch
spit your venom
let it loose
you're a masochistic whore
who loves it rough
bloody wankers
who come off soft aren't for you
a fucker with a hard swagger
sets you ablaze
the fire in your soul
will be a burning inferno
once again
just wait for a hard hitter
to come up to bat
take it in the gut
like you like it
wait on it cunt
it's coming
candy coated bullshit
chokes and suffocates
my fire brewing under the surface
Crimsin is taking control
fuck your broken heart
suck it up bitch
spit your venom
let it loose
you're a masochistic whore
who loves it rough
bloody wankers
who come off soft aren't for you
a fucker with a hard swagger
sets you ablaze
the fire in your soul
will be a burning inferno
once again
just wait for a hard hitter
to come up to bat
take it in the gut
like you like it
wait on it cunt
it's coming
Published 12th Nov 2013
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12th Nov 2013 6:05pm
Jaysus Crims
I guess this is confessional poetry, kind of Jekyll and Hyde, 'cept it's Jekyll who's control here.
of the two you've just posted, I like this one best for it's confidence and language. the last two stanzas are wonderful
good stuff, shine on
I guess this is confessional poetry, kind of Jekyll and Hyde, 'cept it's Jekyll who's control here.
of the two you've just posted, I like this one best for it's confidence and language. the last two stanzas are wonderful
good stuff, shine on
12th Nov 2013 6:22pm
Anonymous
12th Nov 2013 6:08pm
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15th Nov 2013 3:59pm
Anonymous
12th Nov 2013 6:39pm
Crim,
Wow! Reminded me of the Townes Van Zandt, "Pancho and Lefty" lyrics: "Wore his gun outside his pants
For all the honest world to feel". Loved the hard hitting, take no prisioner style of this write! Enjoyed!
tornado
Wow! Reminded me of the Townes Van Zandt, "Pancho and Lefty" lyrics: "Wore his gun outside his pants
For all the honest world to feel". Loved the hard hitting, take no prisioner style of this write! Enjoyed!
tornado
12th Nov 2013 9:14pm
Anonymous
12th Nov 2013 6:48pm
you are hard on yourself
but it makes for a very good poem
Kitty
but it makes for a very good poem
Kitty
12th Nov 2013 9:15pm
thank you beautiful Kitty I will try not to be so hard on myself :) peace Brenda
12th Nov 2013 6:51pm
"just wait for a hard hitter
to come up to bat"
I liked this line, being a baseball fan and all. Alex Rodriguez came to mind...
Gemini
to come up to bat"
I liked this line, being a baseball fan and all. Alex Rodriguez came to mind...
Gemini
12th Nov 2013 9:17pm
thank you Gemini love Alex Rodriguez.. some heavy slugging poets here as well :) peace Crim
Anonymous
- Edited 12th Nov 2013 7:56pm
12th Nov 2013 7:40pm
C'Mon Bitch! You can take it!
Wow, great stuff, Crim! almost made me get my back up ;)
"suck it up bitch
spit your venom
let it loose"
YEAHHHH!
Wow, great stuff, Crim! almost made me get my back up ;)
"suck it up bitch
spit your venom
let it loose"
YEAHHHH!
12th Nov 2013 9:18pm
12th Nov 2013 7:48pm
And she comes back swinging... Kickin' ass and takin' no prisoners, either.
Love the first two lines.
Love the first two lines.
12th Nov 2013 9:19pm
12th Nov 2013 8:36pm
You know how I like the hard-hittin' ones the best :) Your poetry packs brass-knux...
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13th Nov 2013 1:06am
thank you Fire lovely lady you a hard hitter in a beautiful way for sure :) peace Crim
Anonymous
13th Nov 2013 3:08am
Need to learn this...
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14th Nov 2013 00:35am
Hard hitting indeed-shots in life...they do come and energize from time to time-excellent rawness here!!!
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21st Nov 2013 11:00pm
great flow
no greeting card work for you
I truly admire your capacity to give us cold fork reality.
Totally raw with no apologies.
Great writing.
no greeting card work for you
I truly admire your capacity to give us cold fork reality.
Totally raw with no apologies.
Great writing.
21st Nov 2013 11:05pm
thank you Poet though I have a soft side that is a romantic that doesn't come off here much love Crim :)
