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My Crown My Kingdom
You once stole my crown
my being
without any feeling
but I'm taking it back
I'm tired of your crap
You think I'm weak
and that my world is bleak
without you
but thats not true
I am powerful
and my kingdom is wonderful
though not always sane
when I'm there i never feel any pain
my being
without any feeling
but I'm taking it back
I'm tired of your crap
You think I'm weak
and that my world is bleak
without you
but thats not true
I am powerful
and my kingdom is wonderful
though not always sane
when I'm there i never feel any pain
Published 24th Jan 2011
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28th Jan 2011 00:58am
this is a wonderful poem! i love it! you do a great job of making the metaphor work with what you are feeling
28th Jan 2011 2:10am
:) thanks writing this was great i finally decided that my ex wasnt worth my time that i was fine without him
:)
28th Jan 2011 3:59am
yea i know that feeling of realizing that moving on was best. there was this famous poet or writer whose wife died and so he burned all the pictures and stuff that remind him of her and wen someone asked him why he said "to dwell on the past would be both weak and morbid"
28th Jan 2011 4:06am
1st Feb 2011 5:05pm
This was NICE! Quick and to the point. I remember this feeling, even after so long. Keep it up!
1st Feb 2011 5:56pm
This works because you used no structure, other than simple rhyme. It is short, but why write more when less is more!
Story telling in two stanza's...I take my hat off to you...or should that be my crown!
regards,
Hooded
Story telling in two stanza's...I take my hat off to you...or should that be my crown!
regards,
Hooded
3rd Feb 2011 4:36pm
