restored (gone fishing)

I love the easy, laid back phrasing of this; the phrases read so naturally and don't have any of that tricky weight that poems sometimes seem to collect through too much of something or other. In a way, I wonder why it's broken up into line breaks. I think the words, and the great open voice behind them, do the job of lifting and diving that a line break would otherwise do. 'Closest paycheck that won't bleed my life of its love is three thousand miles west decided yes today' is a line you can just swim over its so brilliantly fluid. Feels like it wants to be stretched out, not nudged into short lines.
Plus, thought it was great that 'sharpens his tongue' was followed by that 'philosophers lost stone' which makes your tongue all confused.

I broke them into the simplest ideas and groupings that I could. Your words are an encouragement to try and be a bit more bold with letting the lines carry through....thank you kindly on the thoughts

Those spores weren't that friendly to me, they can be some right cunts. I agree with that guy who's higher than me, decided yes today made me cut off when I was reading, I would just slipped past without the line break, doesn't feel it had enough to merit for a line break either but maybe that's just my melodramatic tastes. Anyway JMHO, having said all that, you know your the poet for me, I couldn't not like what you wrote :)

ha, sorry bout the feisty spores you encountered, trust me that there some awfully friendly fuckers out there too... I did knock off one line, and pulled up that "yes" line, hope its reading more fluidly...thank you on your kind words,and your thoughts