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i want to see the blood!
once again the voices in my head caused a relapse
controlled me with their malicious cravings for blood...
i break apart a cheap shaver to collect the razor
each slice brings tears to my eyes and pain to the flesh i tear
once again you pushed me to this addiction
lied to me and hurt me with your words...
blood trickles down my arms and into my shaking hands
tears burn my eyes and collide with the blood
once again i'm left for the reaper
lost and broken in darkness i fade...
shallow breathing and icy hands feel the warmth of blood
a young life is so easy to end
[once again i'm alone and dying
this time i shall succeed in trying...
if i keep cutting over these open wounds i'm sure to die here
dying alone with a broken heart is something i strongly fear...][/font]
Published 20th Jan 2011
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21st Jan 2011 2:08am
this is so relatable that it hurts to read.. and you posess such a strong talent at writing so well.
you portray extremely vivid imagery in this poem and havent held back honesty due to rhyme ^.@ which i love btw.
keep it up sweetie. hard and painful stuff youve got here... but the power in it will never fade
you portray extremely vivid imagery in this poem and havent held back honesty due to rhyme ^.@ which i love btw.
keep it up sweetie. hard and painful stuff youve got here... but the power in it will never fade
21st Jan 2011 4:25am
after reading this it felt as if i just had an appointment with my blade... wow deep stuff dark also.. it made me feel whole.....
21st Jan 2011 10:15am
thank you dementeddamsel :') your comments are always so sweet xx
thank you deathdoorman, im glad you enjoyed it :) x
thank you deathdoorman, im glad you enjoyed it :) x
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22nd Jan 2011 7:54am
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22nd Jan 2011 7:59am
22nd Jan 2011 5:29pm
omg sarah this poem is so painful to read you had me in tears :(
great structure and imagery; i totally agree with DementedDamsel on her comment!
i hope you'll be okay. if you ever need to talk you know where i am xx
great structure and imagery; i totally agree with DementedDamsel on her comment!
i hope you'll be okay. if you ever need to talk you know where i am xx
22nd Jan 2011 5:40pm
i'll be fine don't worry.
thank you.
and thanks i'm glad you like my poem :) x
