Winter Girls

I love this. Made me really smile, I have trouble with love too. Brilliant - short, to the point, like a little riddle. =]

hi ... thanks for the commenr and glad i ould put a smile upon your dial :) also glad you love it. comment made me smile too

The speech marks around the 'Winter girl' comment are wrong btw =/ and I like Opheliac's idea for it.

i really liked your theme and the shortness of the poem but i would really like to see more depth in the first 2 lines. as for the final line it's just the icing of the poem  

it is short, things can be short... lots of things are EVEN short. I like an idea of things being short...some poets have taken SHORT and written great offerings;

When form
appears
the spirit
wanes.

This, however, in my opinion, states nothing,
it reads like something already grey.

perhaps it states nothing to you... but it states alot to me, as i am the one that's endured these emotions.

sorry if it holds no meaning to you.

this is really Interesting I like it.

for your emailed description about your poem, without it I would have been lost to the deeper and more intese secrets behind your clever writing. Can't wait to read more

Awesome I remember reading this. Great work. :)