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Creek Street Runnings
Along the stage of creek street running's
dressed a man held warm by arms his lover
the knight rides cry cross Guinevere sighs
and too was seen the promise
Barb wire hooks try to grab with cross-eyed looks
shady day dealers pay, set up fence for the squealers
As Rollo dole Cole opens his hand for a five
they slap him back opening the sky
Wrapping their jackets
in leather soul patches
they stole a view
and flew and flew
flying into:
Winds blowing, away with loss and prison
their coasts, cross and ocean
solving division with school wise addition
to lands borne free clutched in unity
Wrapping their jackets
in leather soul patches
they stole a view
and flew and flew
flying into:
Glides sailed with secret string
tying not boundary just everlasting
while loose cannons watching fail to fly
the balls needed to see such majesty
Caesar the belief his diamond and keep
as Cleopatra sings her gift their wings
holding to only change that made it
spent as living for one another
Wrapping their jackets
in leather soul patches
they stole a view
and flew and flew
flying into:
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Re: Creek Street Runnings
Anonymous
20th Oct 2013 7:48am
Guinevere, Ceasar and Cleopatra....
Seems like a modern version of old tales revised.
Always a pleasure to read your work, Soul!!!
Seems like a modern version of old tales revised.
Always a pleasure to read your work, Soul!!!
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20th Oct 2013 7:53am
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Anonymous
20th Oct 2013 8:01am
Same here, Soul, old values I keep high in my book, Id love to scribble my poems on parchment , dipping a feather into dark blue ink....
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20th Oct 2013 8:03am
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20th Oct 2013 8:11am
I love the rhymes & the chorus. I think it combines the classic with the avant-garde rather well. That's a hard effect to achieve. This'll make a great track.
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re: Re: Creek Street Runnings
20th Oct 2013 10:12pm
Much appreciated Butcher-if only I could sing i'd give it a whirl-but I love my dog.
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20th Oct 2013 10:24am
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20th Oct 2013 10:13pm
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20th Oct 2013 11:41am
Oh indeed they will fly together to a melody only they can hear...in the end its only that or burst. Good read, Soul.
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re: Re: Creek Street Runnings
20th Oct 2013 10:15pm
Indeed-the only burst is the sounds of fireworks-Thank You Dear Grace!!!
Re: Creek Street Runnings
20th Oct 2013 6:01pm
An interesting piece Soul, good luck in the comp. I am rooting for you!
Red
Red
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re: Re: Creek Street Runnings
20th Oct 2013 10:18pm
Thank You Dear Red :)-tried my hand at Bruces way of approach...though I only like the first two albums so it limits...I'm not a good chameleon.
Re: Creek Street Runnings
the repetitive stanzas almost alternating in occurrence indeed makes the reader to sing within.the lang rhyming in your style makes smooth read, interesting piece!
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re: Re: Creek Street Runnings
20th Oct 2013 10:21pm
Thank You Uma I'm glad it read smooth and catchy...I'm not the best with lyrics.
Always appreciate Your thoughts!!!
Always appreciate Your thoughts!!!
Re: Creek Street Runnings
20th Oct 2013 9:46pm
Soul your tales of old mixed with modern day affairs have me captivated.. thank you peace Brenda :)
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re: Re: Creek Street Runnings
20th Oct 2013 10:24pm
Thank You so much Dear Crim:)
It all Mirrors the Journey eh?
life then life now...I can rarely separate time.
It all Mirrors the Journey eh?
life then life now...I can rarely separate time.
Re: Creek Street Runnings
22nd Oct 2013 00:32am
Mixing the past with the new was well done, I have to agree with Uma, it has a fine flow to it.
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