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Training Trains
The trains not even on the station, the driver still sleeping before his daily routine begins. Dreaming of destinations visited and porters whistles after the announcements are read out. The driver, yet to pass his final exam, hoping to be alone when he presses go and stop, feeling the power play on the dead man waiting.
Yet we wait on the station, imagining the chug chug sound of oncoming carriages and comfy locations flying past. there's no one here, no porter with his whistle at the ready, No speaker to read out over the loudspeaker. Lost with no destination mapped out, Weaker by the week as the frustrating bite of winters arrival blows down from the north with more of the same prayer than a lullaby of hope, with differant walls to wallpaper over with promises of better times ahead as I'm pulled from station to emotional station awaiting my departure with or without.
Yet we wait on the station, imagining the chug chug sound of oncoming carriages and comfy locations flying past. there's no one here, no porter with his whistle at the ready, No speaker to read out over the loudspeaker. Lost with no destination mapped out, Weaker by the week as the frustrating bite of winters arrival blows down from the north with more of the same prayer than a lullaby of hope, with differant walls to wallpaper over with promises of better times ahead as I'm pulled from station to emotional station awaiting my departure with or without.
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Re: Training Trains
4th Oct 2013 8:53am
Hello rose. This is a beautifully tranquil piece for the reader of deep thought moments where one just stands considering what to do when one finally gets home. The frustrating bite of winters arrival. Perfect. Tyvm. Syn
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4th Oct 2013 9:25am
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4th Oct 2013 9:35am
Thankyou Theo
Its as it is
Always trying to change the outcome to what feels inevitable within
Sloth Slow has never been my fortè
Its as it is
Always trying to change the outcome to what feels inevitable within
Sloth Slow has never been my fortè
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Anonymous
4th Oct 2013 3:31pm
It has a nostalgic feel to it, something out of a lost era with the winter chill slowly seeping through with echos of sadness.
Rose it's beautifully done postcard like imagery well portrayed.
Rose it's beautifully done postcard like imagery well portrayed.
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4th Oct 2013 4:26pm
I got the imagery too....clod, alone, waiting...I know how that feels. Great expression of this.
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Anonymous
4th Oct 2013 4:51pm
Oh Rose, you pulled me too. Still, in the back of my mind I think about the possible better times ahead.
Thank you
Thank you
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4th Oct 2013 7:08pm
There are so many poems with hidden messages this on too.. I loved the closing lines about emotional departure with or without.. strong message.. brilliant Rose.. peace Brenda
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Anonymous
4th Oct 2013 8:44pm
I understand this kin of hopeless waiting all too well. Hope you fin a destination and an engineer fast on the throttle to get you there.
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5th Oct 2013 8:56am
What is it about trains that provide such a wonderful metaphor for love and passion ....airplanes get us there quickest - trains get us there best.
Love this ink.
LSP
Love this ink.
LSP
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