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One Star/The Sun {w. Miss Chi}
one star will guide us across the desert of discontent,
will carry us beyond the obsidian mountains, to deliver
us to the verdant valley, secure and blessed in the
radiant light that we adore, one star.
The sun will lead us to the well of joy,
Will carry us over and above the meager ridges, to take
Us to the fruitful orchards, blossoming and blooming in the
Infolding warmth from which mankind evolved, the sun.
Published 1st Oct 2013
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Anonymous
1st Oct 2013 3:57am
This is lovely. well done, you two!
1st Oct 2013 3:58am
1st Oct 2013 4:13am
Anonymous
1st Oct 2013 5:11am
Beautiful imagery, well scribed, wonderful job by both you!
1st Oct 2013 6:40am
1st Oct 2013 12:38pm
i dont know why by reading it i remembered song of velvet underground, "who loves the sun"..
thank you both for sharing it, either when i am rather "not everyone" than big sun lover.
it sounds very convincing
thank you both for sharing it, either when i am rather "not everyone" than big sun lover.
it sounds very convincing
1st Oct 2013 4:09pm
I wanted to thank you, JF, that you teased out a totally different side concerning my poetry style. I like what we created!
1st Oct 2013 11:28pm
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