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resuscitation
Falling into you
With legs entwined
Rolling together
Our hands caressing
Mouth to mouth
Quenching the fire
Loving in the moments
Chest to chest
We come
With legs entwined
Rolling together
Our hands caressing
Mouth to mouth
Quenching the fire
Loving in the moments
Chest to chest
We come
Published 24th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2013 7:54am
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24th Sep 2013 9:39am
24th Sep 2013 7:56am
Anintense short verse leaving the reader to join ,the essence of the story in the final line. I like it.
24th Sep 2013 9:37am
Anonymous
24th Sep 2013 8:18am
Sensual indeed and the form most definitely entwined :)
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Anonymous
25th Sep 2013 4:40am
Brief, but contains all...
25th Sep 2013 5:11am
Anonymous
- Edited 1st May 2021 7:46am
25th Sep 2013 1:28pm
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25th Sep 2013 2:49pm
2nd Oct 2013 7:08am
This reminds me of one of my poems. http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/129431-cancer-moon/
I enjoy when others can express an intimate moment in words. You did a wonderful job here. Simplistically detailed...I think that's what impacting. A lot of reads online but no feedback so I thinking of re editing...make it more simple!
I enjoy when others can express an intimate moment in words. You did a wonderful job here. Simplistically detailed...I think that's what impacting. A lot of reads online but no feedback so I thinking of re editing...make it more simple!
2nd Oct 2013 7:16am
Just try and be yourself writing
If you dont understand the words meaning don't use it
If my poetry is simplistic its because thats what I'm comfortable with
Give honest feedback and they will come
If you dont understand the words meaning don't use it
If my poetry is simplistic its because thats what I'm comfortable with
Give honest feedback and they will come
