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Term in al
Frail bones, cold uninviting was the flesh, fading bit by bit with each year, little warmth garnered from the heart, winter
once more would be a struggle. But still they came, arriving in their hundreds. And she would accept, accept and welcome.
Boys beaming and girls giggling, boys in blazers, clutching new briefcases, girls in pleated skirts with bags in multiple
colours.the boys telling tales of heads down toilets and corporal punishment, girls whispering of what teachers to avoid
with their over friendly hands.. as they looked at the boys eyeing up potential friends, Those that were confident, those that
weren't, looking elsewhere.
Come on in me dearies, don't be alarmed she would say, if she could, come on in, I won't bite.
once more would be a struggle. But still they came, arriving in their hundreds. And she would accept, accept and welcome.
Boys beaming and girls giggling, boys in blazers, clutching new briefcases, girls in pleated skirts with bags in multiple
colours.the boys telling tales of heads down toilets and corporal punishment, girls whispering of what teachers to avoid
with their over friendly hands.. as they looked at the boys eyeing up potential friends, Those that were confident, those that
weren't, looking elsewhere.
Come on in me dearies, don't be alarmed she would say, if she could, come on in, I won't bite.
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Re: Term in al
20th Sep 2013 3:18pm
You paint a vivid picture...
sinister and boisterous,
lively versus the lifeless...
like this :)
sinister and boisterous,
lively versus the lifeless...
like this :)
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Re: Term in al
Anonymous
20th Sep 2013 7:07pm
Wow Rose, you painted so well the beginning of 'new year' and also metaphorically looking into it, how with the change of the seasons creeping into chilling winter.
Beautiful...!!!
Beautiful...!!!
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re: Re: Term in al
20th Sep 2013 7:33pm
Yes Vee this is what I was trying to portray
The old lady being the school her heart the boiler
The school was the one I went to
Horrid cold flaking sad looking
They knocked it down the year after I left
We did shed a tear. as cold as she was none of us wished her I'll will
The old lady being the school her heart the boiler
The school was the one I went to
Horrid cold flaking sad looking
They knocked it down the year after I left
We did shed a tear. as cold as she was none of us wished her I'll will
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20th Sep 2013 9:04pm
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Re: Term in al
20th Sep 2013 9:29pm
The dress code for us girls was rather relaxed but for the boys in years one and two of secondary schl they had two wear blazers..odd sounds rather posh even but sadly it was the roughest school in the county:(
Re: Term in al
Anonymous
21st Sep 2013 00:51am
This could be so many schools i attended. Never quite warm enough. Catholics give so much to their churches, but it seldom makes its way to the schools. And the portable classrooms were even worse...
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re: Re: Term in al
21st Sep 2013 6:47am
I think older schools have this cold and univiting way about them doesn't help when 80% of the people who walk through her gates hate the place
Re: Term in al
21st Sep 2013 11:36am
AT my school the cure for inattention during class, on a freezing day, was to have all the windows open to wake us up.Thankyou for the poem
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re: Re: Term in al
21st Sep 2013 1:07pm
Ouchy indeed
Or the slipper (plimsole) across the knuckles
Though oddly enough us girls were spared this
We had the pleasure of the ruler across the open palm
Just sounds barbaric now, yes I did taste the ruler once wsd enough trust me!
Or the slipper (plimsole) across the knuckles
Though oddly enough us girls were spared this
We had the pleasure of the ruler across the open palm
Just sounds barbaric now, yes I did taste the ruler once wsd enough trust me!
Re: Term in al
21st Sep 2013 5:22pm
Beautifully written the depths and expressive use of temperature was a triumph. Bravo. Syn
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re: Re: Term in al
21st Sep 2013 5:26pm
Re: Term in al
You have so many beautiful lines throughout this poem. The very first words caught my attention and I wasn't disappointed as I continued to read. You've said a lot in few words. I really like this.
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22nd Sep 2013 6:19am
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