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Your muse
I see your muse
like an old mill
breaking illusions
of night that run
into rain,unabsorbed
febrile shadow.
like an old mill
breaking illusions
of night that run
into rain,unabsorbed
febrile shadow.
Published 14th Sep 2013
| Edited 15th Sep 2013
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14th Sep 2013 5:09pm
i would love to be able to express how i like certain things and why in some educated way like hemi and especially mr A do but i just don't have it like that. i dig your style in general miss rhaki. this is fluid,flows well at the same time stays tightly knit.
leaves a bit to long for though i must say.
seems like an excerpt or intro.
it feels like that lil paragraph on the back of a well worn paperback i find in a thrift store that i must purchase and i know it will be worth millions more than the 50 cents they want for it. i wonder how someone could ever be giving enough to drop this one off but am glad they did..........
leaves a bit to long for though i must say.
seems like an excerpt or intro.
it feels like that lil paragraph on the back of a well worn paperback i find in a thrift store that i must purchase and i know it will be worth millions more than the 50 cents they want for it. i wonder how someone could ever be giving enough to drop this one off but am glad they did..........
Johnny
i felt too that's bit long...
actually trucked in more words
a detailed feedback and a picture
served the need
else this was just rambling
for escaping my addiction.
Thankyou :)
means a lot .
i felt too that's bit long...
actually trucked in more words
a detailed feedback and a picture
served the need
else this was just rambling
for escaping my addiction.
Thankyou :)
means a lot .
Anonymous
14th Sep 2013 5:54pm
great imagery with an ageless issue rahki
you are indeed a true poet
one can see such great love in your world selection....
strider
you are indeed a true poet
one can see such great love in your world selection....
strider
15th Sep 2013 10:10am
14th Sep 2013 7:45pm
I love what this ditty is saying and the imagery it evokes. Wonderful Rakhi.
15th Sep 2013 7:20am
This is so precise and expertly done that it makes you want to devour it again and again!
excellent ink!
excellent ink!
15th Sep 2013 8:22pm
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