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REAL EYES REALISE !!!
Entered in the competition " The Eyes have it "
I observed your eyes
Beautiful and dark
Telling the hidden tales
Of losing the inherent spark.
The kohl in the blue eyes
had a lingering effect
making way to infinite hearts
with so many compliments to collect.
Reflection in the eyes
with a blurred image
speaking a new language
of a fitted grimace.
Fighting with the answers
of the challenges blown
In realm of the known
Seeking for the unknown.
Removing bandage from the eyes
for the justice of your negative soul
Cascading tears needs goodbye
Fresh dreams are on the roll....
I observed your eyes
Beautiful and dark
Telling the hidden tales
Of losing the inherent spark.
The kohl in the blue eyes
had a lingering effect
making way to infinite hearts
with so many compliments to collect.
Reflection in the eyes
with a blurred image
speaking a new language
of a fitted grimace.
Fighting with the answers
of the challenges blown
In realm of the known
Seeking for the unknown.
Removing bandage from the eyes
for the justice of your negative soul
Cascading tears needs goodbye
Fresh dreams are on the roll....
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4th Sep 2013 6:05am
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Anonymous
3rd Sep 2013 2:27pm
beautiful write brinda...good look!
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4th Sep 2013 3:48am
This is a deep write, I enjoyed it very much my friend, had to read it a few times to see all you describe... Very well done
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6th Sep 2013 8:30am
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Anonymous
7th Sep 2013 7:46pm
Just beautiful!!! Good luck, no that you need it! :)

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9th Sep 2013 5:37am
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9th Sep 2013 5:27am
Damn that flow was so perfect and precise!!! It was such a pleasure at how easy it was to read! Loved every stanza! Such an awesome write!!! Good luck with the competition!! This is a real winner!
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9th Sep 2013 5:40am
Wow !! Elated at such a beautiful comment :) Your words means a lot to me :) Many thanks !!
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13th Sep 2013 5:35am
Wow Brinda! This was Awesome!
Amazing lines, fluidity through out the piece. Truly love this! Xo
Pen Smile~
Amazing lines, fluidity through out the piece. Truly love this! Xo
Pen Smile~
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13th Sep 2013 6:36am
I am glad you did :) Then its worth writing ;)
Thanks for your precious words. Welcome back :)
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2nd Nov 2013 4:48am
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its very interesting, the way u have placed those stanzas there ..
the third n fourth stanza has a totally different rhyme scheme than the first two n last stanza .. that caught me well... it felt like bridge to a song ....
this piece has got a lot of depth , u truly justified the beauty those eyes ....
keep up the good work...
keep Rollin
cyanide...
the third n fourth stanza has a totally different rhyme scheme than the first two n last stanza .. that caught me well... it felt like bridge to a song ....
this piece has got a lot of depth , u truly justified the beauty those eyes ....
keep up the good work...
keep Rollin
cyanide...
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27th Dec 2013 6:51am
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24th Feb 2014 8:12pm
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14th Nov 2015 2:57pm
Of course you know I had to come look for this after your comment...and it did not dissapoint...i can see how our poems indeed have that relatable factor...nice write
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