eek  said the wisdom

I like it. Don't think it needs the last line, though. It still shines through. Here you were last week acting like you were going to be a sweet and mild grandpa. We humored you for a bit anyway.

Cheers Steve

I'd been weighing up that last line just as you commented, so thanks for that, it's out the window.

figured I'd grab a twig out of your bushel and go a different direction. I'm not sure how I feel about it in terms of being poetry, it took some restraint not to throw in at least a couple of internals. figured I'd post it and see what the minds think

ha, yes, yes you did, and so it seems I put a bit of wood in your hands and told you it was a mouse

..wait

thanks for dropping by Steve  

More like you put a mouse in our hands and told us it was wood.

i have no idea on earth why i needed this and it hit the spot sir. and for me the last line is why i faved it. we all got our own thing. =) this is (how do i not sound cliche) beautiful ...

ah, Devil-woman

you needed it, that's all that matters. I'm happy to be the one that provided it.

thanks for dropping by Miss, for leaving your thoughts and listing this little scribbleing.

may Satan comfort you always

the last line is perfect... it gives you the justification you somehow decided you needed for the silly trick. I love everything about this.

Petit one,

Thank you kindly dear Lady, yeah you got me there. I find it's always better to have some excuse for his mother when he's been traumatised by my silliness

Well, that's a big lesson from a lump of wood - or a dead mouse. Wait, I'm confused, what am I holding here?

A tidy little amusement of words, Craic, made me smile.

Takti, if you don't know what I put in your hand then I'm afraid for your sanity haha ..more than usual

I was thinking of changing 'comedy to 'array, what ya reckon?

I've just been over to your page and seen this beauty:

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/124793-the-fire-lakes-collab-with-alexander/

thanks for dropping by Ata, and for leaving your thoughts

welldone
little
snippet for thee old learning cuuuuuuuurve.

write right in thy rites

Danny-Bhoy

Thank you kindly good sir, it's always a pleasure to see your words

Enjoyed the read.
Third stanza do you need, actually, just and bit?
Either to remove or substitute  removing actually may upset the first line.

comedy of expressions . . .comedy in the sense of drama most original use of this much neglected and misunderstood word.

Mr Kexby sir, nice to see you

Glad you enjoyed, I think you're right about the third stanza. Actually seems out of place now I re read it, but I think the line will survive if I leave just where it is under it, It's not needed either granted.

funny enough the three words that stick out were the three I put in to soften the tone a little.

much appreciate your eyes here good sir, thank you kindly    

An after thought indeed ! I found it funny . I like funny so I say leave it flawed and leave it funny it works xoxo cz

Gigi me ol' flower

not sure I like the implications of 'flawed, I prefer imperfect :)  

glad you liked it, thanks for dropping by and leaving a piece of your Latino mind

A succinct, lesson to be learned poem. Last line is a great ending.

Jazz man, sorry I missed this comment, keep missing the on account of all the poem notifications

always good to see you knocking about the place and dropping over to my scribes, leaving some words, thank you kindly for that good sir  

you are welcome

Lmao....Wisdom?! You're a character! Gotta love it! Xo

Hey, it's monsoon season again , cool it's raining


good to see you back pretty lady, haha, it is what it is :)

thanks for the visit and words miss

Awesome! Right up my alleyhole!

gawd damned fan fuckin' tastic addvyse!!!!  rM