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Fall Has Come~
Walking in the crisp cool air
the sound of leaves floating
everywhere
Tree's of green change colors
vividly awakening the eyes
seeing the seasons beauty
There's a country smell that
we all love taking us back to
some memory
Seasoned wood crackles in
smoldering stoves smoky
scents breeze past
Apple everything homemade
with sweet cinnamon drifting
through than pumpkin enters
the sound of leaves floating
everywhere
Tree's of green change colors
vividly awakening the eyes
seeing the seasons beauty
There's a country smell that
we all love taking us back to
some memory
Seasoned wood crackles in
smoldering stoves smoky
scents breeze past
Apple everything homemade
with sweet cinnamon drifting
through than pumpkin enters
Published 21st Aug 2013
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Anonymous
21st Aug 2013 4:58pm
love that time of the year tl...nice write
21st Aug 2013 4:59pm
Anonymous
21st Aug 2013 5:09pm
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21st Aug 2013 5:16pm
Anonymous
21st Aug 2013 7:00pm
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21st Aug 2013 9:35pm
Anonymous
21st Aug 2013 5:39pm
I love fall and I love this poem! Great!
21st Aug 2013 5:41pm
Anonymous
- Edited 22nd Aug 2013 4:38am
21st Aug 2013 8:27pm
Tommie you have painted a beautiful picture with this piece...it awakens sight, sound, smell and taste.
21st Aug 2013 9:36pm
21st Aug 2013 8:59pm
In our English 'Fall' is 'Autumn' - the title could be changed for the British market without changing one word of the poem, and still read true to life.
21st Aug 2013 9:38pm
Anonymous
21st Aug 2013 9:59pm
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21st Aug 2013 10:44pm
22nd Aug 2013 7:41am
Well done, my favorite time of year and the poem seems to capture part of it nicely, though if I may point out at the end
"~sweet cinnamon drifting
through than pumpkin enters"
It really should be then not than, I don't mean to pick it apart, we've all made mistakes with words like these two where they are similar.
That being said, on a 1-10 this for me personally was a 10
"~sweet cinnamon drifting
through than pumpkin enters"
It really should be then not than, I don't mean to pick it apart, we've all made mistakes with words like these two where they are similar.
That being said, on a 1-10 this for me personally was a 10
22nd Aug 2013 2:12pm
Anonymous
12th Sep 2013 1:40am
Thanks for the slice
