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Walk Away
I lift my head
look the world in the eye
I've been given a load a shit
Lord--and I don't know why
Born to a world of pain
you gave more than your share
You took what I would never give
But then who said life was fair
The heavens cry for me
I have fallen from grace
I made dying my reason to live
now- I spit in YOUR face
You take without giving
Don't you know nothing is for free
You will pay with your soul
while I walk away free
found the photo online. It's not mine I just borrowing it
look the world in the eye
I've been given a load a shit
Lord--and I don't know why
Born to a world of pain
you gave more than your share
You took what I would never give
But then who said life was fair
The heavens cry for me
I have fallen from grace
I made dying my reason to live
now- I spit in YOUR face
You take without giving
Don't you know nothing is for free
You will pay with your soul
while I walk away free
found the photo online. It's not mine I just borrowing it
Published 5th Aug 2013
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5th Aug 2013 9:48pm
Lol.. I spit in your face. Very dynamic shaunda. It's hurt and pissed, raw for a better description I guess. It has almost an air of arrogance, the ending is like comparing yourself to a god. But it's also uplifting, presenting the pain while still picking yourself and moving on. Nice job ^_^
6th Aug 2013 2:09am
Thank you so much. You got it just right. I would love to learn to critique like you do.
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6th Aug 2013 2:15am
"Unlike me who wallows daily in wanting the strength to kill myself." No!! I didn't know you ever felt this way. You are always so kind and uplifting. You hide your pain well. Too well, I think. There are so many here you can talk to. You know that, Right?
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6th Aug 2013 00:13am
6th Aug 2013 2:17am
6th Aug 2013 1:11am
To me this is a shout of "I will survive in spite of you" and that gives me hope for your future Shaunda the brave of spirit.
6th Aug 2013 2:19am
6th Aug 2013 2:29am
The first two lines and the last one I haven't gotten around to feeling yet, but the rest describes a feeling I know all too well. That if there is a deity, hes either sadistic, catatonic or just plain doesnt care. It's been a while Shaunda, I've missed seeing you kicking around on here. It's nice to see your still kicking ass :)
6th Aug 2013 2:49am
ahaha. Ok. I must confess. This was written for my father. I was liking everyone's comments so much, I was afraid if I told everyone it wasn't about god, the comments would stop. So there goes, everyone. The truth. Blast away at me for my devious deceptions. muahahaha
Thanks Dystomy
Thanks Dystomy
6th Aug 2013 3:13am
Lol I knew that..... Of course I knew THAT.... I was just checking to see if you knew that (?) lol one father in particular or 'our father who art in heaven' this is still well written, proud and just as relatable. Excuse me while I try and figure out what sheepish looks like :)
6th Aug 2013 3:36am
Ahahaha.I'm so glad you got me straight on that. Did i pass the test. And don't worry. You were sheepish quite well. I should know. I've worn it myself. Often :)>
6th Aug 2013 6:13pm
6th Aug 2013 6:24pm
As always, Thank you. I've been gone awhile but now I'm back. Feels like home.
6th Aug 2013 7:06pm
23rd Dec 2013 11:23pm
I like it because it says no matter what I will keep going and that's also my philosophy. I to have to take this state of mind. Good thought provoking poem.
15th Feb 2014 5:47pm
