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Tower road
summers' impatience squirms in its' seat
during the end of the first act
throwing squeals at the stage
from the back of the aisle.
2. The last few days have rolled in
spotty showers, off the back of June's owl.
The frogs sacrifice themselves under the spell
of perspiring electrons, dashing ecstatic suicide
across the lonely road bearing its name, from the
tower that sits midway down its length.
3. Under the tower, in an old farmhouse
the lovers scrape the underbelly of the moons
mistletoe, into milk chocolate. Sandalwood bur
rows a bassline under the copper kettle, so the
brew can proceed, essential oil of emerald.
4. The rains gave way to the glycerin sweating
dynamite, of the foothills to July's furnace. The
miser has snuck into yesterday's pantry and bedding
rendering that day dead to lazy. Today the joyish fool
returns home after a decade's slumber, exorcising
the sleeper through the pores of the trails, that
weave themselves out from the end of Tower Road.
during the end of the first act
throwing squeals at the stage
from the back of the aisle.
2. The last few days have rolled in
spotty showers, off the back of June's owl.
The frogs sacrifice themselves under the spell
of perspiring electrons, dashing ecstatic suicide
across the lonely road bearing its name, from the
tower that sits midway down its length.
3. Under the tower, in an old farmhouse
the lovers scrape the underbelly of the moons
mistletoe, into milk chocolate. Sandalwood bur
rows a bassline under the copper kettle, so the
brew can proceed, essential oil of emerald.
4. The rains gave way to the glycerin sweating
dynamite, of the foothills to July's furnace. The
miser has snuck into yesterday's pantry and bedding
rendering that day dead to lazy. Today the joyish fool
returns home after a decade's slumber, exorcising
the sleeper through the pores of the trails, that
weave themselves out from the end of Tower Road.
Published 16th Jul 2013
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16th Jul 2013 6:32am
Baron... genius. I'm glad I was pointed in your direction! You sir, are truly talented!
16th Jul 2013 10:49am
I think that you have the right balance here of literal and enhanced.
It is a journey that I take some great pleasure in, spending this summer in the owl country. On the one hand I get to go out and do the deep explorations of my rural dreamtime. Then I get to come home and live through some shades of yours.
You don't tell us "this is what I'm doing" here. There are no "like" or "as" words to get in the way and give us a dumb-world explanation that these are metaphors. It is all presented as if it were literal. In some sense it really is.
It gives us a sense of a collective magic that multiple minds are exploring over many times and places. Not in the sense of magic where reality breaks down and the impossible happens but in the sense that there are animate, complex flows and forces just below the surface.
Just curious if you are going to give a name to this place you've been exploring or if you are going to introduce regular characters? Well I babbled enough.
It is a journey that I take some great pleasure in, spending this summer in the owl country. On the one hand I get to go out and do the deep explorations of my rural dreamtime. Then I get to come home and live through some shades of yours.
You don't tell us "this is what I'm doing" here. There are no "like" or "as" words to get in the way and give us a dumb-world explanation that these are metaphors. It is all presented as if it were literal. In some sense it really is.
It gives us a sense of a collective magic that multiple minds are exploring over many times and places. Not in the sense of magic where reality breaks down and the impossible happens but in the sense that there are animate, complex flows and forces just below the surface.
Just curious if you are going to give a name to this place you've been exploring or if you are going to introduce regular characters? Well I babbled enough.
18th Jul 2013 9:32pm
Totally awesome Steve, thanks a ton for that comment. Been in this place a few weeks and really working to balance that literal and metaphorical thing you discussed, so glad it read like it did for you. I have been hinting at characters and the place is coming more clearly into focus so I am leading towards developing them
