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coarse goodbye
there are times
i can think of
nothing but you
though it's obvious
your love was
far from true
i can't kick you
out of my bed
for our lovemaking
was all made
in my head
(like you always in
the back of your mind)
so i shall rise
above spite
but in the heat of
the night
while entangled in
her amorous embrace
i hope (against hope)
your performance
is dead-weight
i can think of
nothing but you
though it's obvious
your love was
far from true
i can't kick you
out of my bed
for our lovemaking
was all made
in my head
(like you always in
the back of your mind)
so i shall rise
above spite
but in the heat of
the night
while entangled in
her amorous embrace
i hope (against hope)
your performance
is dead-weight
Written by
faithmairee
(Faith Elizabeth Brigham)
Published 11th Jul 2013
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Re: coarse goodbye
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11th Jul 2013 2:06am
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Re: coarse goodbye
11th Jul 2013 2:18am
Thank you for making my night, Gabe. Your comments are so appreciated it. Glad you liked the pic too. I honestly thank you for your cool comments. xo Faith
Re: coarse goodbye
11th Jul 2013 4:57am
Wonderful Faith! However, you have written about my life as well...nice to know I'm not alone.
Amazon
Amazon
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re: Re: coarse goodbye
19th Jul 2013 9:12pm
Thank you, my dear friend. You always say the sweetest things. I'm sorry I'm so late replying to your wonderful comments as I've been working overtime. Hope all is well with you! Faith xoxo
Re: coarse goodbye
11th Jul 2013 7:35am
A relatable write for many I imagine Faith, including myself. Great expression and pen.
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19th Jul 2013 9:12pm
Re: coarse goodbye
11th Jul 2013 4:34pm
brilliant as always, its good for a little anger to influence your work, great stuff
marcus
marcus
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Re: coarse goodbye
Anonymous
11th Jul 2013 6:21pm
Superb ink, Faith. Much depth, & a very compelling, & relatable write. Enjoyed the read a lot, as always. :) xo
*Peace & Love* Carlene
*Peace & Love* Carlene
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Re: coarse goodbye
Anonymous
11th Jul 2013 7:35pm
Wow! this is an awesome write with forceful emotion. Love it!! :)
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Re: coarse goodbye
12th Jul 2013 4:12am
Very good write, I enjoyed the tone and emotion behind the poem..
Cheers! Scot.
Cheers! Scot.
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Re: coarse goodbye
Anonymous
12th Jul 2013 8:10pm
This is a write that has a strong ending, which gives the poem just the bit of "anger" it floats on, thanks for sharing this poem, Faith!
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