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That's a good girl
My EBT collar makes me an
American
mutt
My owner gives a
SNAP
of his fingers and like a good bitch
my panting tongue and doleful eyes
gets me table scraps
My tits long dried for any pups
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*SNAP, the Supplemental Nutrition Assistance Program formerly the Food Stamps Program, families living in poverty receive Electronic Benefits Transfer (EBT) cards to eat
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Re: That's a good girl
9th Jul 2013 3:19pm
LSP You know how we were discussing the future of delivering poetry, well this is what I had in mind. Short and sweet like a slap in the face. Record this as a spoken word, make it look like an ad and the punters will be left scratching their heads.... "what the fuck was that?"
I like it man, strong political statement. Nice one.
I like it man, strong political statement. Nice one.
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re: Re: That's a good girl
10th Jul 2013 11:01am
Thanks for the feedback Case ...
I actually wrote this as an entry for the FOOD competition ... I just wanted to flip it a little - rather than just write about the glories of food.
I'm writing another piece for that comp that I'm looking to do spoken word for ... But now you've got me thinking I should do something for this one as well.
Thanks.
LSP
I actually wrote this as an entry for the FOOD competition ... I just wanted to flip it a little - rather than just write about the glories of food.
I'm writing another piece for that comp that I'm looking to do spoken word for ... But now you've got me thinking I should do something for this one as well.
Thanks.
LSP
Re: That's a good girl
9th Jul 2013 6:25pm
Whoa! Gasp! Wow! What a statement!!
SNAP was INGENIOUS! :)
It's sad that we live in a country where many would DIE without that collar providing scraps!
But thankful that the same country offers that collar! Peace~
SNAP was INGENIOUS! :)
It's sad that we live in a country where many would DIE without that collar providing scraps!
But thankful that the same country offers that collar! Peace~
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re: Re: That's a good girl
What's sadder is - that the collar is getting tighter and tighter ... Student loan rates just doubled and no one blinked - it's easier to finance a Mercedes Benz than it is a college education, one of leading economic indicators in our country ... Not to mention the inflation rate for the cost of an education outpaces any other "product" we consume.
When the middle class struggle to put food on the table, what's that leave for others? Sadly, we're all wearing collars.
Thanks for the love Rain, xoxo
LSP
When the middle class struggle to put food on the table, what's that leave for others? Sadly, we're all wearing collars.
Thanks for the love Rain, xoxo
LSP
Re: That's a good girl
10th Jul 2013 12:26pm
re: Re: That's a good girl
10th Jul 2013 12:40pm
Thanks for the read DH and the feedback ... It let's me know I'm going in the right direction.
LSP
LSP
Re: That's a good girl
13th Jul 2013 00:23am
great write. 'SNAP' might not be the best acronym for that program, makes me think of the subservient 'snap to attention!'...
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re: Re: That's a good girl
13th Jul 2013 00:45am
Re: That's a good girl
Anonymous
14th Jul 2013 6:46am
Collar is pretty damn accurate. Most states have guidelines that keep the people who want to eclipse the system "collared" while encouraging those who prefer to milk the system for generations. Rough piece, but the point is driven home.
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Re: That's a good girl
Thanks for the read and comment ... And you're right - it does become an inherited affliction and addiction passed from one generation to the next ...
... LSP
... LSP