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Torturous Life
Misunderstood and crying
Pain bleeding down my arms
He watches and launches at
my tear killing me even more
than before I hate him so but I love him
more than he'll ever know
He does not see how tortures
and kills he treats me as if
I'm his little tortured play
toy I cry from his lies why can't I
just see he doesn't want or love me
for nothing more than a toy he searches
for me to torture me more so while I
hide and cry I take out my bloody knife
and end it all
Goodbye Torturous Life
Pain bleeding down my arms
He watches and launches at
my tear killing me even more
than before I hate him so but I love him
more than he'll ever know
He does not see how tortures
and kills he treats me as if
I'm his little tortured play
toy I cry from his lies why can't I
just see he doesn't want or love me
for nothing more than a toy he searches
for me to torture me more so while I
hide and cry I take out my bloody knife
and end it all
Goodbye Torturous Life
Published 1st Jul 2013
| Edited 2nd Jul 2013
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1st Jul 2013 10:09pm
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1st Jul 2013 10:25pm
my tear killing me even more
than before FULL STOP
I hate him so but I love him REST
more than he'll ever know STOP
He does not see how tortures
and kills he treats me as if
I'm his little tortured play
toy OK
I cry from his lies why can't I
just see he doesn't want or love me STOP
for nothing more than a toy he searches
for me to torture me more so while I
hide and cry I take out my bloody knife
and end it all RUN ON
Goodbye Torturous Life
than before FULL STOP
I hate him so but I love him REST
more than he'll ever know STOP
He does not see how tortures
and kills he treats me as if
I'm his little tortured play
toy OK
I cry from his lies why can't I
just see he doesn't want or love me STOP
for nothing more than a toy he searches
for me to torture me more so while I
hide and cry I take out my bloody knife
and end it all RUN ON
Goodbye Torturous Life
1st Jul 2013 10:26pm
i think that this poem has potential, avoid run-ons and use full stops indicated by commas of periods. it would create an awesome flow, thus making the poem more interesting
1st Jul 2013 10:34pm
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4th Jul 2013 5:36pm
Love makes us blind to the obvious but we crave their love and when they dont give it to us, we want it all the more. Nice painful piece
5th Jul 2013 1:31am
