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Strength
I notice him flash by
passing my open door
rushing down the department floor
he’s energy pure
A hint of his inviting scent
inescapably blends
into sharp memories of
yesterday‘s event
When he devoured me
and relentlessly sank
his merciless hardness
into my wanton flesh
while his predatory zest slashed
wounds that‘ll not properly heal
until again I’ll willingly serve
as his proximate meal
Hungrily watching him
my heart races to a full stop
and I pray - and I hope
for strength
to escape my inner mess
and let him
simply
pass.
passing my open door
rushing down the department floor
he’s energy pure
A hint of his inviting scent
inescapably blends
into sharp memories of
yesterday‘s event
When he devoured me
and relentlessly sank
his merciless hardness
into my wanton flesh
while his predatory zest slashed
wounds that‘ll not properly heal
until again I’ll willingly serve
as his proximate meal
Hungrily watching him
my heart races to a full stop
and I pray - and I hope
for strength
to escape my inner mess
and let him
simply
pass.
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Re: Strength
Anonymous
21st Jun 2013 10:29pm
Chiyo,
Sometimes one should never pass up a good opportunity to feed ; ) Like the inner play you have going on in this write. Enjoyed!
tornado
Sometimes one should never pass up a good opportunity to feed ; ) Like the inner play you have going on in this write. Enjoyed!
tornado

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re: Re: Strength
Thanks for the read and your lovely comment, tornado. I better feed on that :-). Less dangerous to choke on it lol!
Chi
Chi
Re: Strength
Anonymous
22nd Jun 2013 2:06am
Love the sophistication & style in this stunning poem, Iris. Brilliant thought-play going on, here. GREAT psychological work, indeed. Please write more more more!! Loved the read, dear Poet! :)
*Peace & Love* Carlene
*Peace & Love* Carlene

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re: Re: Strength
22nd Jun 2013 8:45pm
Thank you, dear Carlene for your really great comment *blush*. I think very much of your opinion and am glad you like this poem! I try to write more :-). I need to, too. And your opinion encourages me!
Re: Strength
22nd Jun 2013 5:08am
re: Re: Strength
22nd Jun 2013 8:55pm
Thank you very much, JeJe! I'm glad you like the poem and that I seemingly didn't build too many mistakes into it :-).
Iris
Iris
Re: Strength
Anonymous
1st Jul 2013 9:36am
Moments of weakness should be indulged Chi ;)

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re: Re: Strength
1st Jul 2013 9:43pm
Yeah, Donato! The spirit ist willing but fortunately the flesh ist weak :-).
Chi
Chi
Re: Strength
3rd Jul 2013 3:53pm
mmmmm give in to it lady! Give in n give it up lol
Sensually pleasing for sure :)
Sensually pleasing for sure :)
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16th Jul 2013 11:18pm
Re: Strength
19th Jul 2013 11:36pm
Perhaps strength comes from knowing when to bend and yield rather than remain rigid and hard. Also, I've noticed that smell is an important motif in your poems. Poetic pheromones can be quite powerful.
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re: Re: Strength
19th Jul 2013 11:46pm
Strenght means sort of rigid to me. But it's better to bend sometimes since the danger to otherwise break is far worse. So yes, you're right. And I love your 'poetic pheromones'!!! I would never have thought of this wonderful expression myself :-)!
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