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'Golden Tongue'
A haggard looking man
fresh in from the 'jungle
mines'
walked the city streets...
searchin' wearily
tryin' to find
a woman to share
in the treasures
of his soul's design...
Stopped in his tracks
after seeing his life's sunshine
he stumbled, then mumbled,
finally marvellin' at her eyes so kind...
Spoke, in as eloquent a manner
as he could muster
droppin' to his knees all afluster,
said...
"Forgive me,
for lackin' in my mind's capacity
for when I first layed eyes 'pon your
beauty's audacity...
I admit it freely, a loss of verbiage
had Gotten the best of me...
and I foolishly
referred to you as a perfect ten
yet when given a little moment,
see supreme your beauty
to truly comprehend...
it was quite clear
you are far more
than a simple ten,
you are a priceless GEM"
fresh in from the 'jungle
mines'
walked the city streets...
searchin' wearily
tryin' to find
a woman to share
in the treasures
of his soul's design...
Stopped in his tracks
after seeing his life's sunshine
he stumbled, then mumbled,
finally marvellin' at her eyes so kind...
Spoke, in as eloquent a manner
as he could muster
droppin' to his knees all afluster,
said...
"Forgive me,
for lackin' in my mind's capacity
for when I first layed eyes 'pon your
beauty's audacity...
I admit it freely, a loss of verbiage
had Gotten the best of me...
and I foolishly
referred to you as a perfect ten
yet when given a little moment,
see supreme your beauty
to truly comprehend...
it was quite clear
you are far more
than a simple ten,
you are a priceless GEM"
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Re: 'Golden Tongue'
14th Jun 2013 5:15pm
Geeesuuus! You my friend dug deep and came up a poetic jewel, beautiful!
Red
Red
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re: Re: 'Golden Tongue'
14th Jun 2013 5:24pm
aaawwww thank u sweetness, i'm humbled n honored by your sweet words! :) appreciate u...
Re: 'Golden Tongue'
14th Jun 2013 5:16pm
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14th Jun 2013 5:30pm
aaawww i don't get the 'gold?' l.o.l.
thank u precious one always happy to get a visit n the kindness just me wanna dance! l.o.l.
appreciate u much :)
thank u precious one always happy to get a visit n the kindness just me wanna dance! l.o.l.
appreciate u much :)
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14th Jun 2013 5:37pm
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14th Jun 2013 5:56pm
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14th Jun 2013 5:19pm
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14th Jun 2013 5:57pm
totally agree with ya my sweetness,
one certainly can not... thank u always for your unwairing support always! :)
one certainly can not... thank u always for your unwairing support always! :)
Re: 'Golden Tongue'
Anonymous
14th Jun 2013 5:28pm
Slick ink
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re: Re: 'Golden Tongue'
14th Jun 2013 6:06pm
thanks once more for a return visit...that's very flattering n i truly appreciate your time spent n your commentary...
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Anonymous
14th Jun 2013 7:10pm
This is truly sweet and well thought out. It seems to me that the 'perfect 10" was a reaction to her beauty, while the 'priceless gem' encompassed more of the whole person. Lovely poem.
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re: Re: 'Golden Tongue'
14th Jun 2013 7:48pm
Well that could certainly be the case, but this wasn't from anyone or thing... Just purely my crazy imagination lol
Thanking you truly though, as always I appreciate u my dear! :)
Thanking you truly though, as always I appreciate u my dear! :)
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Anonymous
14th Jun 2013 11:15pm
Love the way this piece ends, Poetikmind. Great poem! Great read, my friend! :)
*Peace 'n Love*
Carlene
*Peace 'n Love*
Carlene
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14th Jun 2013 11:30pm
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Anonymous
14th Jun 2013 11:50pm
You have a golden pen
which writes poems that
are a pleasure to read....
wonderful
Kitty
which writes poems that
are a pleasure to read....
wonderful
Kitty
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re: Re: 'Golden Tongue'
15th Jun 2013 5:44am
Aaaawww my friend, what a super sweet comment! I shall treasure this, thank u so much :)