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Spanish Fly
She loiters
by my lips
soaking in
the carbon dioxide
as if my halitosis
provides osmosis
to a higher being.
by my lips
soaking in
the carbon dioxide
as if my halitosis
provides osmosis
to a higher being.
Published 6th Jun 2013
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Anonymous
6th Jun 2013 10:36pm
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7th Jun 2013 2:31am
6th Jun 2013 10:43pm
7th Jun 2013 2:34am
Thanks so much, Soulman. It came to me while I was lunching at my usual pizza place and this fly is just hanging out with me. One thing led to another and I thought I had a 20 word competition poem but I dug it so much I submitted it. I'm so glad you liked it.
7th Jun 2013 4:34am
7th Jun 2013 1:51pm
Anonymous
9th Jun 2013 9:12am
Very imaginative poem, Tony. "She loiters by my lips," is very poetic. Love that line. The last three lines really nail this piece. The last line is a killer. Impressive! Loved the read! :)
Carlene
Carlene
9th Jun 2013 3:43pm
