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Sometimes
Sometimes I think I have
fallen off the rabbit hole
Instead of in
I am wandering in a strange
terrain that's vaguely familiar
Sometimes I think I may be
living in the mirror
looking out and only seeing
a me, looking into a haven
of another me
Sometimes I feel lost
in a tunnel of echoes
each voice speaking
in tongues
hailing the spirits
Its a silence here
within the quiet
tranquil beyond the peace
yet, my heart beat
is slowing, missing the bellows.
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Re: Sometimes
6th Jun 2013 9:52am
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Anonymous
6th Jun 2013 10:11am
looking out and only seeing
a me, looking into a haven
of another me
^^^^awesome work, Grace..perfect poem
a me, looking into a haven
of another me
^^^^awesome work, Grace..perfect poem
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6th Jun 2013 10:19am
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6th Jun 2013 12:43pm
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Anonymous
6th Jun 2013 2:03pm
you are a poet for sure...and, not just sometimes...nicely done grace!
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6th Jun 2013 2:35pm
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6th Jun 2013 3:19pm
Re: Sometimes
6th Jun 2013 2:45pm
After we pat you on the back for a job well done you should give yourself one. Tape this up on the refrigerator of your inner self.
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6th Jun 2013 3:20pm
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Anonymous
6th Jun 2013 8:00pm
This has a haunting quality, Grace. The terrain, living in the mirror, tunnel of echoes, and silence. Each stanza, so different, adds to the feeling of being lost on the inside.
Bravo, Lady! Beautifully done.
Bravo, Lady! Beautifully done.
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re: Re: Sometimes
7th Jun 2013 00:22am
Yes, you got that so right. Lost. Thank you for reading and leaving a comments Scat.
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