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Queen Of The Susquehanna
Queen
of
the
river
That's
what
they
call
me
Keeper
of
the
murky
water
Protector
of
animal
and
human
I
keep
the
weeping
willows
dropping
So
their
leaves
and
branches
dangle
in
the
water
While
the
ducks
swim
and
fish
on
the
water's
edge
I
see
over
all
the
beauty
Each
fork
in
the
river
leads
to
something
new
Taking
the
visitor
on
an
adventure
Lush
greens
and
fresh
air
all
around
Sounds
of
the
river
moving
a
boat
so
tranquil
I
am
the
peaceful
hush
that
captures
ones
gaze
You
can
call
me
Queen
Of
The
Susquehanna
of
the
river
That's
what
they
call
me
Keeper
of
the
murky
water
Protector
of
animal
and
human
I
keep
the
weeping
willows
dropping
So
their
leaves
and
branches
dangle
in
the
water
While
the
ducks
swim
and
fish
on
the
water's
edge
I
see
over
all
the
beauty
Each
fork
in
the
river
leads
to
something
new
Taking
the
visitor
on
an
adventure
Lush
greens
and
fresh
air
all
around
Sounds
of
the
river
moving
a
boat
so
tranquil
I
am
the
peaceful
hush
that
captures
ones
gaze
You
can
call
me
Queen
Of
The
Susquehanna
Published 29th May 2013
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29th May 2013 4:16am
29th May 2013 4:20am
Tommie
Nice diversity showing in your writing. this is quite the read, painting a nice serene image.
couple of things that might be worth looking at;
6th stanza.
As
it's
leaves
and
branches
dangle
in
the
water
as.. dunno, I think 'so would be a better fit, and since you're speaking of multiple trees 'their would be much better than 'its here.
that's about it really, as said you've done really well.
hat tip yo ya, shine on
Nice diversity showing in your writing. this is quite the read, painting a nice serene image.
couple of things that might be worth looking at;
6th stanza.
As
it's
leaves
and
branches
dangle
in
the
water
as.. dunno, I think 'so would be a better fit, and since you're speaking of multiple trees 'their would be much better than 'its here.
that's about it really, as said you've done really well.
hat tip yo ya, shine on
Yes, got it....that does read much better in my head like
that!I always look forward to your helpfulness ...your
tips are much appreciated!
That's better!!
Thank you my friend ;))
that!I always look forward to your helpfulness ...your
tips are much appreciated!
That's better!!
Thank you my friend ;))
29th May 2013 4:58am
29th May 2013 12:44pm
Anonymous
29th May 2013 9:53am
Well done tl....my dad was from Pittsburgh...
Strider...
Strider...
29th May 2013 12:50pm
That's awesome Strider!My father in-law is from Carbondale.
I have lived my whole life on this river, it's very beautiful, but I have seen it's path of rage as well...I wanted to capture it's
beauty not destruction ;)
Thanks for reading!
I have lived my whole life on this river, it's very beautiful, but I have seen it's path of rage as well...I wanted to capture it's
beauty not destruction ;)
Thanks for reading!
29th May 2013 3:55pm
29th May 2013 3:58pm
29th May 2013 10:51pm
In my home area of England/Wales we have the River Severn - at face value your words could be lifted to describe it (it has periodical floods and it used to be navigable into mid-Wales). In Roman times it had its own goddess, Sabrina.
29th May 2013 10:53pm
Very interesting SS...I appreciate you sharing, she sounds
like a beauty!!Thank you very much ;)))
like a beauty!!Thank you very much ;)))
